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Aimster
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0 posted 2004-01-07 03:28 PM


**Hi ya'll.
I'm having major writers block these days,
and this was just something that kind
of wrote itself today. does it make
any sense?**

The Water

the water that once was a raging river
now is a quietly moving stream
all the experiences I've been witness to
in my eyes can be seen

the water once rushed in
I thought for sure I would die
Learning something everyday though
I've learned the release of a good cry

before my life was dark and cloudy
and though i still have moments of blue
life is so much more than it was
now that I have you

The pain that once ripped through my heart
Is steadily easing more and more
Though now the rain sometimes drizzles
No more does it pour

Perhaps life is but a stream of water
Once it was murky, but now it is clear
As I realise to let go of some things
And to hold others so dear


"When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter"

© Copyright 2004 Amy Kennedy - All Rights Reserved
Susan Caldwell
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1 posted 2004-01-07 03:33 PM


Makes perfect sense to me

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

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2 posted 2004-01-07 03:35 PM


Makes sense to me, too, Amy. Funny how those muses work, huh? Nice write.

~sky

Hold on, if you feel like letting go
Hold on, it gets better than you know....
~Good Charlotte

Terrina
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3 posted 2004-01-07 03:49 PM


This is good, but I see you trying to tie it all together with the water somehow and though in most of the cases it works, there are a few places where you try to hard...but the fact that this just flowed out of you, may be the reason the title is water;-)
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4 posted 2004-01-07 04:33 PM


enjoyed
Margherita
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5 posted 2004-01-07 05:31 PM


Well ... isn't water LIFE!?

You created a beautiful liquid flow of words born in your heart.

Love, Margherita

McLean
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6 posted 2004-01-07 05:41 PM


Joy
for the raindrop
is entering
the river

~M. oakley, author

This writing makes much sense and I thoroughly enjoyed the moment.  The imagery of the "rushing" turned to calmness is exceptional in displaying what for many is an intangible aspect.  I believe we are all but raindrops, searching frantically for our whole.

Most excellent find in your poem today.  Thank you.

McLean

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7 posted 2004-01-07 05:54 PM


yes it does.....and we all go through the block.....relating well hugssss girlie...

Lauren~

~~**~~
This morning theres a calm I cant explain
By the time I recognize this moment it will be gone,  
I will bend light pretending it lingers on

Aimster
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8 posted 2004-01-07 06:35 PM


thank you all for your most generous
and warm replies....

take care,
amy

thanks lauren, i knew you'd relate and
understand.

"When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter"

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