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The Web's Cold Shore
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The Web's Cold Shore |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
My keyboard doesn’t feel the word love Nor does the monitor of my Dell Life would be much simpler if We weren’t living in Internet Hell Inventions are meant to push us Into newer and better ways But this invention has become The bane of most of my days Without saying the words to you Seeing your eyes change in the light How can I know if this feeling Is the same, that you feel tonight? I’m tempted to just turn it off Pack it up; move on; run and hide Every time I reach for the switch I feel a piece of my heart has died Millions of people log on here each day Looking for a love to last or to lust How can I be sure that you are The one my heart can trust? Maybe we should just pretend To be friends and nothing more So I have another reason to stay Surfing on the Web’s cold shore |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
this one struck a funny bone in me, not the haha kind but the kind that made me sit back and think of the irony of technology. Besides that I also really enjoyed the poem beautiful in its own right and sad, as well as SO TRUE!! Heh yeah anyways, nicely done, thanks for the read. ~Live and Laugh~ Because of you I laugh a little harder, smile a little more, and cry a little less |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I really liked this -- it seems quite in tune with the times! |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sharon, your poem is so true of so many people nowadays. There are so many lonely folks in this great big world, both men and women. All they are looking for is a kind word. I can just imagine how many people are hurt by the deceitful ways of others on the internet, who prey on the lonely. It's very sad to me. Hugs to you,  Ethel |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I hope those reading see the dangers in the use of this new modern technology, and also the warning I read in this poem. You can't be in love with a keyboard! The internet has provided an escape from the mundane, lonliness, bordom, and most importantly reality. I don't believe in loving someone I can not feel, smell, or see. It takes time to realize that escaping in fantasy is not reality. Sadly, on a computer yanyone can represent themselves in whatever way suits them, or how the other person wishes to perceive them, and a lot of people get hurt both mentally and physically. Sorry getting carried away, but if some do find romance on the web (and some do,) they are few and far between. Oh and a good poem this was too  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
clever write yes, it is cold sometimes (sigh) |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
so well expressed... yet, somehow I feel just being friends is not a small matter ... Regards to you, Devine one? sudhir |
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jaicie114 Senior Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 750On the edge of forever |
PdV...great write...very thoughtful and intriguing. Thanks! Love and Light...jc This I know as Truth...we are all Beings of Light. |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
A very interesting write on Internet relationships. Enjoyed! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Once again, you tacked that one on to the screen. Good job, devine one! |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Inventions are meant to push us Into newer and better ways But this invention has become The bane of most of my days Yes, with only a screen to look at and not hearing the correct meaning of one's words or seeing the eyes shift....computer moments are sometimes Hell. Great write. Chris  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
PoetdeVine~ A wisdomed penning~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Sharon, Very nicely done!! And ohhhh so true...  "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
this is really good gal..... |
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wintertao Member
since 2003-11-17
Posts 366Okaloosa Island, FL |
I like..... |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
very well done - enjoyed the read - Paul |
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WildPoet Member
since 2003-11-10
Posts 205California |
The level of your insight keeps getting deeper and deeper. WildPoet  |
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McLean Member
since 2004-01-05
Posts 484state of marital bliss |
I'm so glad I searched back a few days... I love this! I can relate to every single word. My husband and I met through this means, and there were times that, before we actually met, our connection through this media was a bit scarey. Thank goodness he wasn't a psycho! I'm going to share your poem with him tonight. Both he and I spent much time using the internet for entertainment and "what if" purposes...I'm glad to just use it for poetry now! Very good one! McLean |
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Ravenwolfvoyager Member
since 2003-12-25
Posts 326 |
Nicely done Poet DeVine. You are so right there is another technology term out there also called "users." Be weary and trust your instincts. You did a fantastic job delivering this. Thank you. |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
This holds SO MUCH truth to this day and age, with people having complete other lives online sometimes... it makes one wonder which one is really the truth... Never stop.Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all for reading. I've learned the hard way that everyone on this internet is NOT what they seem. And I've also learned that if you are a private person (as I am) a lot of lies are made up to fill in the blanks. You'd be amazed what I've heard people say about ME!!! |
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