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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain 
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hello_ohhhh it was nothing more than the moment between the H and the release of a southern O yet, in that space time stood still a breath snagged itself to my windpipe and lips open to receive and give fell silent though tingled with all the unsaid fruit i wished for you to taste who i am with your, hello_ohhhh *smile* ©snow'04 off the cuff "...why does my skeleton pursue me if my soul has fallen away?" ~p.neruda |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sweeet! |
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Michelle_loves_Mike
since 2003-12-20
Posts 1189Pennsylvania |
lotta ways you could go with this one,,,,,thats wonderful,,,,,for me,,it relates to every morning when i hear the words"hello baby" come from my fiance,,,,, good stuff Michelle I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
I agree with Micky on this one - there are so many ways to go with this, which makes it so much the better. Great writing. |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LadySnow~ Soooooooooo softly done~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Snow Well done, enjoyed. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Off the cuff? Dang! Enjoyed! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oooh myyyyyy...this is wonderful! Hugs~ In the midst of winter.. |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
thank you all very much. i believe in layering my pieces so that there is no black and white ... i like shades of grey and i love to see the take other people get ... this piece is meant to be taken in more than one way... i'm glad it was seen that way. again, thank you! snow. enchantress... i love the Albert Camus quote .. it's been a favorite of mine for a very long time. "...why does my skeleton pursue me |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
you knew this would bring me out of the shadows, didn't you?  |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Very nice indeed Snow. Enjoyed. Chris "At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet." |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
chris, thank you ... i'm glad the piece was enjoyed :-) ~~~~ as for you my friend.. you were never meant to be in the shadows in the first place... so if this did the trick, well then....   *smirk* "...why does my skeleton pursue me |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
But shadows are good, nice and quiet there. *grin* |
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Ravenwolfvoyager Member
since 2003-12-25
Posts 326 |
An awesome write Snow, you do wonderful work!! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Snow, I really like this one...and yes, it could be read many different ways.  Hugs Ethel |
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