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Tim
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since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

0 posted 2004-01-05 11:53 PM

A young man runs atop the levee
not as a god but as a god might run
effortlessly
in cadence with the chant of river's current
ahead, a rabbit scurries into the underbrush
as the young man rounds the bend
leaving behind intonations of the river
echoing off of barren levees.

[This message has been edited by Tim (01-06-2004 12:14 AM).]

Kahlil
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since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

1 posted 2004-01-06 12:57 PM

I can see it! I can hear it! How I love this scene you've painted. Keeping it in my library. May I send it to a friend, as well? ~K~

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

2 posted 2004-01-06 02:22 AM

Well I don't know what you were thinking to bring this on, but what an absolutely glorious painting to view just before bed Tim. Fantastic writing as usual, and Happy New Year to you and that wonderful gal of yours.

Carpe' Diem

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2004-01-06 06:31 AM

Were you watching the runners on the dike across from Burke park? You described it very well, Sir. But dang, all you forgot was to see his breath on the air. It's 3 degrees!

LngJhnAg
Member Elite

since 1999-07-23

Posts 3508
Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

4 posted 2004-01-06 07:26 AM

Great prose, Tim! I can almost feel the crushed granite beneath my feet and hear the sound of every footstep. Great writing!

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2004-01-06 10:21 AM

Tim~
different for you ... different is GOOD~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
[email protected]

McLean
Member

since 2004-01-05

Posts 484
state of marital bliss

6 posted 2004-01-07 08:46 AM

A tasty read, indeed!

McLean

Christopher

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

7 posted 2004-01-07 10:26 AM

pleasing imagery.

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

8 posted 2004-01-07 10:30 AM

enjoyed

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

9 posted 2004-01-07 10:34 AM

Tim...In every child there is part God. Loved this!

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

10 posted 2004-01-07 10:35 AM

Tim
Nothing like a good run along the levee.
Well done.

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

11 posted 2004-01-07 11:15 AM

very enjoyed.

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