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alan6501 Member
since 2004-01-03
Posts 89PA |
IMPRINT Do you find my demeanor way too much demeaning? Am I a symbol of something with a much deeper meaning? When they ask for a hug, do you give them a shove? Are you asking for too much, when all you want is love? Do you bury your head in a pillow to cry? Do you find yourself thinking of different ways to die? Is there a space in your shell so heavy it's a weight? Has the love in your life evolved into hate? These questions are leaving an imprint so deep Answer them quickly so you will see: Life isn't easy, nor is it fair Death isn't the answer, nor is it rare |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
alan, Good thoughts, good write, good read. |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Good questions that have crossed everyones mind at one time or another ~ARH  Open your eyes, open your mind, open your heart, let me come in and show you love.....~ARH |
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xaos Junior Member
since 2004-01-05
Posts 35 |
Are you asking for too much, when all you want is love? Well, theres a question people must ask plenty in life! When the shoulders you cry on turn cold you have a hundred of these questions and nobody ever answers them. Gave me a little shudder reading it, very good! |
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Michelle_loves_Mike
since 2003-12-20
Posts 1189Pennsylvania |
"Life isn't easy, nor is it fair Death isn't the answer, nor is it rare" so true,,,,, Michelle I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike |
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wintertao Member
since 2003-11-17
Posts 366Okaloosa Island, FL |
I like this with reservations...the first line is very weak...the poem needs major work imo. |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Show me someone who likes to play with words, to balance the sounds of them, the rhythms, the background implications of the way they interact. I'll show you a poet. Here's one now! |
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McLean Member
since 2004-01-05
Posts 484state of marital bliss |
Questions we have all pondered, but rarely stated. Very good. McLean |
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ambrish Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 257India |
Life isn't easy, nor is it fair Death isn't the answer, nor is it rare lovely full of wisdom. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Your words play... and they also pack a punch... excellent write! *S* |
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alan6501 Member
since 2004-01-03
Posts 89PA |
Wow, I didn't expect to get this much positive feedback! Thank you very much. I always thought that this poem needed a little work. Thanks again, it's such a reward to get such feedback!  |
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