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wintertao Member
since 2003-11-17
Posts 366Okaloosa Island, FL |
There must be others Who see the setting sun And know What they're about to become There must be others Who read the word And decide There must be others Who walk the outer courts Looking for love That never hurt There must be others I've got a full blown 3 min demo mp3 of this. Its backed with some heavy guitar and vocals in parts so not for the Yanni crowd. If you would like a copy just hit me an e-mail and I'll send it right over. [This message has been edited by wintertao (01-06-2004 10:05 AM).] |
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Terrina Member
since 2003-12-31
Posts 166California |
This is awesome, and yes there are others out there searching for love that won't hurt. I'm not into the whole rock metal...but i'm sure it's great;-) |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Subtle loving earthy understanding spirit moving laughter deceiving empathy Forgot to say "Yes!" Dave |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Yesm I agree....there must be others.....  Hugs  Ethel |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
I started into the lyrics and got hooked to the ABCB in the first four lines, and then got waylaid when that structure failed to materialize in the next four lines. I did follow that "word" and "hurt" tie together, but without the music, I don't know if that was coincidence or intentional, too. I tend to write in rhyme, so I stumble on lyrics that don't. If you think that's bad, you ought to hear me sing! lol (BTW - use "they're" instead of "their.") I agree with your message. There must be others Who see the setting sun And know What their about to become There must be others Who read the word And decide There must be others Who walk the outer courts Looking for love That never hurt There must be others |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
wintertao Of cource there are others, enjoyed. |
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wintertao Member
since 2003-11-17
Posts 366Okaloosa Island, FL |
thnaks all...change noted thanks. |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
Well Done |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Yes, to know that there are others is always comforting. Very nice. Love, Margherita  |
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