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wintertao
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0 posted 2004-01-05 03:16 PM



There must be others
Who see the setting sun
And know
What they're about to become
There must be others
Who read the word
And decide
There must be others
Who walk the outer courts
Looking for love
That never hurt
There must be others

I've got a full blown 3 min demo mp3 of this. Its backed with some heavy guitar and vocals in parts so not for the Yanni crowd. If you would like a copy just hit me an e-mail and I'll send it right over.

[This message has been edited by wintertao (01-06-2004 10:05 AM).]

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Terrina
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1 posted 2004-01-05 03:19 PM


This is awesome, and yes there are others out there searching for love that won't hurt.
I'm not into the whole rock metal...but i'm sure it's great;-)

DavePage
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2 posted 2004-01-05 03:31 PM


Subtle
loving
earthy
understanding
spirit moving
laughter deceiving
empathy

Forgot to say "Yes!"

Dave

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3 posted 2004-01-05 03:37 PM


Yesm I agree....there must be others.....  
Hugs  
Ethel

LngJhnAg
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4 posted 2004-01-06 09:08 AM


I started into the lyrics and got hooked to the ABCB in the first four lines, and then got waylaid when that structure failed to materialize in the next four lines.  I did follow that "word" and "hurt" tie together, but without the music, I don't know if that was coincidence or intentional, too.  I tend to write in rhyme, so I stumble on lyrics that don't.  If you think that's bad, you ought to hear me sing!  lol (BTW - use "they're" instead of "their.")  I agree with your message.

There must be others
Who see the setting sun
And know
What their about to become
There must be others
Who read the word
And decide
There must be others
Who walk the outer courts
Looking for love
That never hurt
There must be others

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2004-01-06 09:27 AM


wintertao
Of cource there are others, enjoyed.

wintertao
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6 posted 2004-01-06 10:05 AM


thnaks all...change noted thanks.
Brad Majors
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7 posted 2004-01-06 10:11 AM


Well Done
Margherita
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Eternity
8 posted 2004-01-06 10:32 AM


Yes, to know that there are others is always comforting.
Very nice.
Love, Margherita

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