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Honesty |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA 
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Now, you have seen and held my thoughts a time. Now, I have seen more than I wanted even though I'm blind. It seems they run in parallel, our lives, but mine behind. I have listened while you tell. I have not wasted time. Now, you go, I remain. I accept mortality. But I wanted you to know I think you have been kind to me. And those bruises you've uncovered, they will heal just fine. Don't worry about my feelings, friend, my feelings are only mine. Iliana |
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harash Member
since 2003-12-27
Posts 99India |
iliana.... A fantastically written thoughts in words... Harash |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
gosh, how sad but also beautiful |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Harash -- thanks. Your taking the time to read it means a lot to me. BEEEEEwell! lol...jo |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Passing Shadows -- you sweetie...thanks for reading the above. Many of my poems are written from emotion -- this one was. It was a goodbye poem for a man who broke the ice around my frozen heart (many years ago). lol......jo [This message has been edited by iliana (01-05-2004 02:15 AM).] |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
iliana, I could have highlit the whole poem! It was very, very well expressed! Gee, haven't we all had this feeling at some time? Very nicely worded. ~~Sadie It seems they run in parallel, our lives, but mine behind. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
thanks so much -- it was written for Q years ago. |
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Michelle_loves_Mike
since 2003-12-20
Posts 1189Pennsylvania |
"my feelings are only mine".....sad that we actually go there,,,,,all should count the same,,,,sweet/sad write Michelle I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Iliana~ I felt a soft release in this penning~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Terrina Member
since 2003-12-31
Posts 166California |
This is lovely. Thank you for sharing. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Very powerful poetry here Iliana - you say it so very well - Paul |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice read  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Again you tell my heart. That's twice today. Yes I'm afraid you're right once again. There can be such awful penalties for the simple fact of honesty......Dare to show who you are, say what you really feel, and be ready for the bullet. So maybe I'm ahead...today I am twice blessed and once cursed. Thank you for this bandage. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Ravenwolfvoyager Member
since 2003-12-25
Posts 326 |
A wonderful write Ilana, it is a sad thing to embrace a single identity when you know through love that you are an identity of two. A wonderful wriote under sadden circumstances. Thank you. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Don't worry about my feelings, friend, my feelings are only mine. I really needed to read this today! So very well written and brutally honest. Loved it iliana~ |
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alan6501 Member
since 2004-01-03
Posts 89PA |
A very HONEST write. I'm adding it to my library. Excellently written. I especially love your ending. |
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McLean Member
since 2004-01-05
Posts 484state of marital bliss |
Salutations! This poem is my life right now! We all interpret a read individually at first, and then see if it is shaded by our experience somehow. At least, that's my take on it. During the past year, my husband and I have lost 4 of our very dear friends. Not to death, but to each other. We were 3 couples. My husband and I the most recently wed. "Two's company, Three's a crowd"...and so it is that my husband and I are without the people we once cherrished so. Your poem is beautifully, and expressively written. I love the closing more than anything...we will heal...and our feelings are just that...our own. Loved this! McLean |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Don't worry about my feelings, friend, my feelings are only mine. There is sadness here... but also strength... it's so easy to believe our feelings don't matter when another tramples on them... but they do. *S* |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Oh, you brought a smile across my face dear one... Well done! TD |
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Youngatheart Member
since 2003-12-30
Posts 333 |
I love the rhythm of this poem. Well done! |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
The bruises. Yes, hearts are always bruised it seems. If no one does it for them, they bruise themselves. |
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