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Open Poetry #30

Suspended in Time

Youngatheart
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since 2003-12-30

Posts 333

0 posted 2004-01-03 08:08 PM

Suspended In Time

The image of a man walking towards me,
    is so familiar and yet so new.
Holding my joy close to my heart,
    I face the fear of what may not be.
His unsure eyes search mine for the answer
    that only time would give and he smiles.
The first touch, the brush of the cheek,
    the gentle kiss had all but been forgotten.
But the sleeping memories, undisturbed and silent
    for so long are suddenly awakened.
For a precious moment time stands still,
    a small gift of eternity just for us.
In slow motion we relive the scene
    that has always been a part of our memories.
Then selfish time moves on as unforgiving life
    forces his image to fade away.
He is suddenly gone
    and I smile through the tears.

Startime55
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since 2003-04-05

Posts 2148
Alberta, Canada

1 posted 2004-01-03 08:22 PM

*sigh* tears of joy and sorrow mingle...joy for the magic of the time spent and sorrow as he disappears from your arms...Stunning...I love every word...

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2004-01-03 08:24 PM

Nice writing...James

ice
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since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

3 posted 2004-01-03 10:35 PM

Enjoyed this poem, even the sad ending,,,,well done, YAH
______ice
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Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

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Gaia

4 posted 2004-01-04 01:33 AM

A sad but good write.
Nice to meet you

did I miss your first post?

Youngatheart
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since 2003-12-30

Posts 333

5 posted 2004-01-04 09:13 AM

Thank you, everyone. I wanted the ending to be bittersweet...what could I have said differently? Midnitesun, I wrote A Freedom So Dear. It is a first work but from my heart.

LngJhnAg
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since 1999-07-23

Posts 3508
Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

6 posted 2004-01-05 02:17 PM

This poem is very poignant. A longing is there that seems almost palpable. Very well written. I sincerely hope this wasn't written about 'Deer or Toe, as they swagger around too much already, lol.

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