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If You Get Dizzy in the Southern Hemisphere, Do You Spin Clockwise?
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If You Get Dizzy in the Southern Hemisphere, Do You Spin Clockwise? |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597
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If You Get Dizzy in the Southern Hemisphere, Do You Spin Clockwise? Free fall is not the right term nor even suspended animation more like levitation held up by some insubstantial power felt but not seen The weight of comfort has been spilled The pull of caring has gone slack as I lie adrift unsettled and unmoved The hollow of this empty bark riding high and vulnerable echoes its failed mission in useless rhymes and verses unheard And since I appear invisible to you you will not see me reach for the tail feathers of a brave red bird rising from the ashes © 010104 |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
has a woman ever told you...that you moved her to tears? well...you do...h |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
A touching poem, Krawdad. |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
you know I clicked on this one drawn by the title thinking perhaps a funny little piece was in store...what I got was something completely different and complete breathe stopping. It was deffinitly a heartstring puller, loved it. ~Live and Laugh~ Because of you I laugh a little harder, smile a little more, and cry a little less |
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misanthropology Junior Member
since 2004-01-02
Posts 17 |
"the weight of comfort has been spilled" haunting line |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I'm with Helen here |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Krawdad~ So touching~ 'And since I appear invisible to you you will not see me reach for the tail feathers of a brave red bird rising from the ashes' Classic stuff !!! *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
well visit here more often, you are never invisible to us Happy New Year Kraw...  M |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This falls into itself, then evolves upward again... It's beautiful, Sir. Thank you. |
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Terrina Member
since 2003-12-31
Posts 166California |
You are great. That poem was wonderful. My father used to tell me, when you look at something and you can't imagine making it any better, it's perfect. Well my dear....I can't imagine making what you wrote any better.... |
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chrissydome Member
since 2003-11-28
Posts 73germany |
touching and wonderful! turning mirrors upside down won't make dust fall off the ground, hiding wounds won't ease the pain, sleep won't make you whole again... |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
and thusly, the phoenix rises anew. nice. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Lotsa lovely images and how you managed to make such a sad tone seem to float mystifies me... and since I feel qualified to answer your query having been dizzy in a southern atmosphere all of my life--the answer is, in fact, yes--but if I'm very quiet inside, not only do I spin clockwise, but I will come to rest pointing North with startling accuracy.  Love ya, E. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
The answer to the title is "Yes, clockwise, sideways and down under". The response to the poem is "Oh MY!" Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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