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crystalclearpoems Junior Member
since 2003-12-30
Posts 16 |
i dont think my poem is very good but hey you can judge it yourself Hope Why are you leaving? Why cant you stay? Why do things always have to go your way? The world is changing and so am I Why do you always make me cry? Why dont you care? Why cant you see how i feel about you and me? I hope you are happy where ever you go and I hope you know you will always be part of my soul |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Personally, I think this is a great write! Keep it up!  Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
I wrote the dance the same way to start with, then I took out all but the final words. Then I considered I had always intended it to be a dance and changed it again. When you are happy with a poem, you will have a good reason to be happy. Dave |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
A poem is expression, my friend, and expressing oneself in a constructive way is always good. Not all of us have the perfect words or the perfect sentences that all look at in awe, but any poem someone has taken the time to write, is a good poem. All good poems can be improved - that's a learned skill developed through the practice of writing, and somewhat, the "study" of writing skills. And ALL writers, bar none, can improve. Well done, jwesley |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
it's sad but shows strength...I hate goodbyes |
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