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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines 
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Journey Home...a late night conversation "Return my soul," said he, the one who made the mistake of serving it to another. Return my soul, so I can have the taste of bitter removed and the blank that I am drawn into filled with my vague intentions. Return my soul, so that my feelings can journey back home to the tip of my tongue and reenter where all truth stops...and questions begin. Let me become more of myself and stop searching for whom I wish to be. Keep me from my silence, and return me to my words. "Return my soul," so I may dream once more. M * for Alicat "Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less." |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
That was very beautiful. I really enjoyed the read. Wonderful job. I love to read your posts. You have a great talent. *Allison* "Come away with me, Wendy. Come away to Neverland." |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
Amazing...it felt like a prayer of one who feels lost in a emptiness of words without his soul....Magnificent writing... |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Let me become more of myself and stop searching for whom I wish to be. Keep me from my silence, and return me to my words You say it so nice, and with feeling. I look forward to your poetry in 2004. Hugs Maur~ |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
If this is true the guy has no sense. Lovely incredible words People reading sometimes dont understand the underplay that people here do. Harmonics, use of words, meaning, emotion, expression It means a lot to read good words. Dave |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Beautifully written, my friend! Returning one's soul is truly a cleansing experience for both the returner and the receiver but the way I see it, some soul's don't deserve returning, and should spend time feeling the agony they've caused. Loved the write though... jwesley |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I am smiling only...because the responses are so varying...and my meaning was so "vague", which was my "intention" (although Alicat should know, I hope, that I used his phrasing, but in my own way) Thank you everyone for reading and your responses  hugs and Happy New Year Maureen |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
This is just awesome! I wish I could write that way! It's awesome!  Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Let me become more of myself and stop searching for whom I wish to be. Keep me from my silence, and return me to my words. I love this. I truly love this. Chris "At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet." |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Had problems opening browser windows on this laptop for most the day, so my apologies for coming late to this one. I do thank you for the email, and I must say this was most splendidly done, and the emotional play behind the facade of wording superb. For you have captured the poet's malaise when writing fails and half remembered snippets of prior whimsy taunt and gibber inanely, whispering 'I bet you can't recite me now!' when the body of work lies attic buried several states away.  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Thank you Saunni, I always look forward to your words and your return. Hugs and Happy New year. Chris, thank you for those words. I promised Alicat subtly (my interpretation) that I was inspired by a few phrases he mentioned in group conversation last evening and would like them for titles or themes for a poem. Ali...no problem in responding. I knew eventually you would get around to reading it. I am just popping in, exhausted from lack of sleep and just reawakened by some hammering across the street...but glad I was, to see your response. Thank you for the inspiration and use of "return my soul" Maureen |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sweet! |
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