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Open Poetry #30

1 January Senryu

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2004-01-01 06:12 PM

1 January Senryu

today castles fell
from sandy legged foundations
by tumbling tide

[This message has been edited by 1slick_lady (01-01-2004 06:14 PM).]

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

1 posted 2004-01-01 06:16 PM

nicely put my friend ... wish I was at the beach to see them tumble.

jwesley

S Arthur Grey
Senior Member

since 2001-03-19

Posts 719
woven by a poet's loom

2 posted 2004-01-01 10:48 PM

and if i could reply . . .

Build your castles fresh
as all come tumbling down
to spill their secrets

s.a.g.

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

3 posted 2004-01-01 11:08 PM

Very nice Helen. Happy New Year! hugs, Chris

"At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet."
-Plato

Darren
Junior Member

since 2003-09-30

Posts 30

4 posted 2004-01-02 01:34 AM

Ahh yes, the tide always comes in, and new castles will be ressurected, only to be washed away by the same tumbling tide next year.

Happy New Year Helen, may your castle find solid ground, and your tides be nothing more than a moat.

GG
Member Elite

since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

5 posted 2004-01-02 01:37 AM

never quite know if their tumble is good.. or bad.
But the words... definitely good!

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

6 posted 2004-01-02 02:37 AM

we all build sand castles, over and over and over

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