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Water Burns
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Water Burns |
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EverRuss Member
since 2003-12-31
Posts 66Indiana |
My mind id gone, hope you're havin fun Im layin here, burnin like the sun Coffee is cold, Im gonna go Words seep out, as they did before Clock is stuck, hands dont turn Thoughts again, Im gonna burn This bed is sharp, knives they bleed I've laid here once before Sprawled out on the floor My demons feed, self-richious put aside You're Someone else the mirror screams back Shes gone now, accept the fact Legs are weak conscience is gone Somebodys here i better run Nowhere to run Nowhere to hide Water burns deep inside Im gonna break and i dont know why Water Burns and The fire Dies |
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lovejunkie Member
since 2003-12-31
Posts 93Indiana |
I think you've really captured emotion in the poem. The coffee being cold is awful. It basically symbolizes your life being cold if you ask me. I think it also shows your at home and comfortable with the pain. Sad but true. Some of us have to live there I guess. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
nothin' ruins the day like cold coffee, ey? I can relate to this write and will be on the lookout for more of you  |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Oh wow! What a wonderful feast you have set out here. Understand well the dance of fire and water. I am sure I will read this several times. TD |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Insanity is the view is see. Your's is an interesting picture. |
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Terrina Member
since 2003-12-31
Posts 166California |
Wow, I love poems that paint a picture, and tells a story. I can really see how you were thinking and feeling and what mind set you were in when you wrote this. |
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