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DaNi:H Junior Member
since 2003-12-27
Posts 21South Carolina, USA |
I sit in this chair. He stands over there. He turns, smiles, and then looks away. I wonder, will I have the courage to tell him today. I do. We're together now, it's been a year. Everyday he says the one thing I want to hear. "I love you" he says Then he asks "Do you love me too?" I do. He got a letter today. They're sending him away. Over seas, to join the fight. The worse part about it; he's leaving tonight. He asks if I miss him. I do. He writes me letters everyday. He says he loves me in everyway. He asks me to marry him, when he gets back. I think to myself, "am I ready for that?" Then he says "Please say yes." I do. Weeks later, two men at my door. They say they need to speak with me. I don't know what for. They hand me a letter, his picture, and the chain I gave him before he went away. I sit there silently, dreading what they're going to say. They say "Look at this picture. Do you recognize this man?" I do. It was him, my only love. They told me the story of the bombs dropped from above. They told me they were sorry but he didn't survive. But because of his bravery there's another soldier alive. They ask me if I understand that he's not coming back. I do. I'm older now, and have moved on. I still think about him, especcially when I look at my son. He doesn't know. That his father, his real father, was a hero. I do. I sit in this chair; He stands over there. He turns, smiles, and then looks away. I wonder, will I have the courage to tell him today? I do. |
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DaNi:H Junior Member
since 2003-12-27
Posts 21South Carolina, USA |
sorry about the length... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Very, very moving. If this was a true event in your life, I am so sorry you had to endure this. |
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DaNi:H Junior Member
since 2003-12-27
Posts 21South Carolina, USA |
it wasn't an event in my life but i've known people that have had to go through that. thank you for caring though. All we hear is Radio ga-ga Radio goo-goo Radio ga-ga All we hear is Radio ga-ga Radio blah-blah -Radio Ga-Ga (Queen) |
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wintertao Member
since 2003-11-17
Posts 366Okaloosa Island, FL |
Excellent..."sorry about the length" ???? Its a perfect length for this, well done indead, Welcome ! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Welcome, and thank you, for a passionate post. And I am in agreement with the other readers, the length is perfect for the write. |
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DaNi:H Junior Member
since 2003-12-27
Posts 21South Carolina, USA |
thank you all |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Awesome write. I could feel the feeings this would bring being in her shoes. WOW. Amazing. |
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mytuesdaywishes Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 254a voice from the musicbox |
whoa, fantastic write...really deep joy has its own justice. and dreams are languid and lawless. and everything bows to beauty, when it's fierce and when it's flawless... |
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IndigoEve Member
since 2003-01-10
Posts 279Etched in the illusion of time |
I don't understand what it is with me about love poems and stories that involve losing someone, but today yours is the third I've read along these lines, and I just feel something. I've never read a poem so beautiful, where the core of it's meaning was in two simple words: "I do." You let me remember how it is to cry today, thank you. I missed the feeling.  Oh, and welcome to PiP! I'll be looking for more of your work  If I were to touch you, would you bleed a velvet river, running miracles through the sodden ground? --Moi |
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DaNi:H Junior Member
since 2003-12-27
Posts 21South Carolina, USA |
thank you very much your positive comments are giving me the confidence to share more... DaNi |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
DaNi:H...This touched me to tears...so well done. Welcome to Passions! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Dani~ Such warmth in this read ...~ WELCOME ... hope to read more of you~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
From the heart. This touched me deeply. Chris "At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet." |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Hi Dani, welcome to a place where you can grow in your poetry. You will find many here that are veterans as well as many who are first time poets... A safe place, one you can enjoy.... Very well done for a first poem. A very mature theme and thought from a young lady. I hope you never have to endure this loss. |
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DaNi:H Junior Member
since 2003-12-27
Posts 21South Carolina, USA |
thanks im sorry any body has to go through this... DaNi |
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