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ranidae_poet
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0 posted 2003-12-30 03:00 PM


As I gaze upon your face
While you tie your sons shoes,
Do I dare be so brazen,
And tell you, you’re my muse?

As we lay hip to hip
In the sweet afterglow
Tell me, do I let it pass these lips?

Shall I attempt to stay awake,
For fear that in my sleep
The silence I may break


When you catch me in my stare
Do I let you in on
That of which I am already aware

Do I tell you, do I let go of this control?
And express to you that which you
Have left upon my soul

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Cpat Hair
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1 posted 2003-12-30 03:27 PM


I enjoyed...
you could build on it a bit or leave it as is, but teh muse for whom it was written should see this..

Sunshine
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2 posted 2003-12-30 04:04 PM



Yes!

ranidae_poet
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3 posted 2003-12-30 04:09 PM


thank you sunshine! and cpat..yes I actually was going longer with it...but cut it off as sometimes I tend to get to lengthy and I didn't want to be redundant...so I stopped...thank you for the suggestion..and as far as letting him see this...I dare not.... not yet anyhow

There are only three beings worth of respect; the priest, the solider and the poet; To know, To Kill  and to create.

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