The Next Stall Over (Response to that Scalawag 'Deer's ugly, ugly poem)

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LngJhnAg
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Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

0 posted 2003-12-30 07:04 AM

I will admit I was there, suffering through my plight,
After having eaten all that horseradish on that fateful night.
However, the pain was nothing compared to what ensued,
As I sat there in my misery over the meal I learned to rue.

The man in the other stall must have thought he was Casanova,
Calling his secret lover while on the toilet one stall over.
I'm not surprised he made his call while sequestered over there,
But think of from where you hear him, when you're called by Balladeer.

'Deer was smoother than the greatest lover I ever knew,
He used lines I'd never heard before as he pitched his woo.
He sounded like he'd been there before, I could hear every word he said,
As I sat just one stall over, there in the restaurant's Head.

I hope 'Deer's story doesn't upset you nearly as much as it did me.
I wasn't expecting what I heard as I sat there in my grief.
I knew 'Deer was on a cell phone, its volume was set at MAX,
And I could hear the other party's voice - IT SOUNDED LIKE TOERAG'S!

heh - ol' 'Deer AND Toerag in one poem - a nice bit of writing if I do say so myself

[This message has been edited by LngJhnAg (12-30-2003 07:33 AM).]

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

1 posted 2003-12-30 07:34 AM

maybe we need a section just for the 3 of you to battle it out

always a pleasure to see what each of you will come up with next...

~smiling
M

LngJhnAg
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Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

2 posted 2003-12-30 07:40 AM

Good morning, Maureen. Here's a hug, keep it for when you need it.

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

3 posted 2003-12-30 08:36 AM

Nah, Maureen - Open has ALWAYS been this trio's venue...and lucky us! Keep it up, boys...I want to see where y'all take us into the New Year!

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2003-12-30 08:41 AM

LngJhnAg
Well you know what they say, practice makes perfect and this was very close. I'm sure he and Toe enjoyed your poem. I know I did.
LOL

garysgirl

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5 posted 2003-12-30 09:41 AM

A good comeback, SailorMan!!

Bonnie j
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6 posted 2003-12-30 11:56 AM

Wow! The Three Musketeers of Bad all on one page. Cool.............
Love Bon-Bon

passing shadows
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displaced

7 posted 2003-12-30 12:31 PM

indeed!

Mysteria

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8 posted 2003-12-30 12:48 PM

I can see it now - a forum
for the likes of just you 3
battling wits in poetry
as cute as you can be.

Would you sell us tickets
or would the show be free?
Tell you what, if your selling tickets,
please save some for me?

You guys have invented a new type of toilet poetry that rocks!

Happy New Year - you done good 2 with one blow!

LngJhnAg
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since 1999-07-23

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Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

9 posted 2003-12-30 01:47 PM

I figure, after this poem, if 'Deer doesn't have a tail already, he'll likely grow one so he can tuck it between his legs and slink off to lick his wounds. heh

Titia Geertman
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10 posted 2003-12-30 08:19 PM

So that's why Deer's mind is wandering off lately

Boy do I need pepsi and popcorn tonight.

Great write John, that'll teach them.

Titia

Like scattered leaves...my words will flow

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

11 posted 2003-12-30 08:28 PM

I so much enjoy the banter between you three!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

In the midst of winter..
I found there lives within me,
an invincible summer.

scorpio
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since 2002-10-02

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right...there

12 posted 2003-12-30 08:40 PM

The War of Words continues. Much to the enjoyment of those of us not directly involved!!

believe in what your heart feels...

jaicie114
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On the edge of forever

13 posted 2003-12-30 09:11 PM

hehehe...yeah...this is good....

Love and Light...jc

p.s. continue...please!!!

This I know as Truth...we are all Beings of Light.

Balladeer

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14 posted 2003-12-30 09:28 PM

Your poetry is going to pot! Toerag and I don't communicate by cellphone. We still use the Captain America decoder rings we got from sending in Ovaltine labels.

Just don't have enough sense to stay down, do ya? An en-deer-ing trait. That's what I like about you - unlike that slug Toerag that heads for the hills when the real men show up.

Nice work, barnacle bum

Nightshade

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just out of reach

15 posted 2003-12-30 10:54 PM

hee hee hee.

Justbleu
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Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)

16 posted 2004-01-24 11:46 PM

I enjoyed this very much!!!
I love the 'Deer but, he did deserve this one!!!!

Thank You for making me laugh!!!!
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

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