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Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

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0 posted 2003-12-30 01:16 AM

On A Distant Hill                        For T.H.

Freedom comes in many forms
                        free to plant, free to burn
playing god we lose it, bind ourselves
                        free to envy, free to love
witless to an artificial codex
                        leaves like parchment flaming
casting out gods or demons we lose
                        where the fire burned hottest
even the ability to discern, to defend
                        the hills’ skin naked to the storm
to feel the blessing when it comes
                        stumps like black wet blisters
for it is discernment not intelligence that draws
                        the flood striving down boulder slopes
a bolder line down between free and bound
                        even as the fires rage unabated
as if standing on a distant hill, safe from the thrust
                        there stands one on a distant hill
safe from the arrogant renderings of whim and time
                        stands nonchalant, conjuring rain
able to stand nonchalant, conjuring rain.

[This message has been edited by Ratleader (12-30-2003 11:22 AM).]

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

1 posted 2003-12-30 01:28 AM

I see your muse is alive and well!

I read your words three ways, once being down the right, then to the left, and as a whole......that's pretty impressive!!!

It's deep, almost gothic, which goes to show your versatility!

~Bravo Ed~

pandonov
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since 2003-10-03

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b/w conscience and insolence

2 posted 2003-12-30 01:41 AM

how right you are

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

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3 posted 2003-12-30 01:42 AM

The word "codex" has three meanings.... depending on what you want it to mean, it is a tablet for rough drafts, it is a religious tome, and it is a stump where prisoners are bound.

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icebox
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

4 posted 2003-12-30 02:15 AM

Very impressive! Stirred many thoughts. Thank you.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

5 posted 2003-12-30 02:27 AM

you took me there

damn

Martie

Moderator

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since 1999-09-21

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California

6 posted 2003-12-30 11:20 AM

Ed...I'll have to echo icebox here...this IS very impressive!

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

7 posted 2003-12-30 11:42 AM

I will always remain impressed
with a poet who will intertwine
poems with substance...
and heart

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

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8 posted 2003-12-30 01:08 PM

Humble *applause*
Excellent penning, dear poet sir~

Happy New Year's blessings to you~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

9 posted 2003-12-30 01:10 PM

stumps like black wet blisters

Like Blues, I've read this as 3 distinct poems... and whether separate or together, the result is striking... your images sear the senses... and your wisdom waits for those who'll heed.

Brilliant work, my friend... yes!

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

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