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huddersfield
Junior Member

since 2003-12-29

Posts 25
huddersfield, England

0 posted 2003-12-29 03:36 PM

Over the hill lies the dream,
Out of sight, but not out of reach,
The river of life meanders through,
Where it flows with the remains of stolen dreams,
With promises broke, that stabbed like a dart,
Into the heart where no one can see.

The river flows with the pain of desire,
Filled, not red with the blood of despair,
But clear, with the crystal tears of innocent times,
Where the dreams were lived and the promises made.

But over the hill lies the dream,
Just follow the river as it meanders through,
Ride the rapids of pain and despair,
Then disembark the raft of life,
For the journey will be over
And life will begin
Follow the river as it meanders through,
For the journey may be over before it begins

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

1 posted 2003-12-29 03:39 PM

"The river flows with the pain of desire,
Filled, not red with the blood of despair,
But clear, with the crystal tears of innocent times,
Where the dreams were lived and the promises made."

Hello and oh my!! Those lines really caught me! Welcome!

Susan

lil' Angel
Member

since 2003-11-14

Posts 116

2 posted 2003-12-29 03:41 PM

huddersfield,

Wounderful poem. It was well written.

Welcome to passions.

Lil' Angel

"There is no wisdom, no insight, no plan that can succeed against the Lord." Proverbs 21:30

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2003-12-29 03:44 PM

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!
What a wonderful entrance post.
I look forward to reading more of your work.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

In the midst of winter..
I found there lives within me,
an invincible summer.

wintertao
Member

since 2003-11-17

Posts 366
Okaloosa Island, FL

4 posted 2003-12-29 03:46 PM

nice, welcome !

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

5 posted 2003-12-29 03:47 PM

Welcome to Passions! We're going to be enjoying your time here!

Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen?

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

6 posted 2003-12-29 04:04 PM

Welcome to Passions! This is a very beautiful first post. I'm looking forward to reading more of your work.
Please check your e-mail for a special greeting from all of us here at PIP.
Ethel/garysgirl
Moderator/Passions In Poetry

huddersfield
Junior Member

since 2003-12-29

Posts 25
huddersfield, England

7 posted 2003-12-29 05:07 PM

Thankyou all for your very kind words, i was a bit dubious about posting a poem on here as this is the first poem i have wrote and was worried by what reaction i may have got, but your responses have definatly given me the encouragement to carry on writing.

Thankyou

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

8 posted 2003-12-29 05:38 PM

LOVED this write!
Yes, it's time to follow the river onto the next town or port'o call.

WELCOME to Passions. Hope to read more from your pen soon.

Martie

Moderator

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

9 posted 2003-12-29 06:06 PM

Welcome to Passions! I enjoyed your poem...keep writing!

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

10 posted 2003-12-29 06:18 PM

For a first post, this is very well said,
saying so much....Rivers can be such a
great foundation for art such as this.

Welcome to Passions, please continue to
post and enjoy our halls of blue.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

11 posted 2003-12-29 06:49 PM

Enjoyed...James

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

12 posted 2004-01-01 03:06 AM

Deep and well written. Welcome to PIP!

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

13 posted 2004-01-02 09:42 PM

I came away with the thought that a river is often at a stand still
for reasons unknown to us, likewise it rushes on it's own when the need arises.

Kind of like the ebb and flow of dreams in a world we cannot keep.

Welcome to Passions hudersfield~

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

14 posted 2004-01-03 05:22 AM

awesome writing!

Welcome to Passions!

xela
Junior Member

since 2004-01-03

Posts 13

15 posted 2004-01-03 06:12 AM

beautiful pictures---my favorite was how you described the waters not as red and painful, but clear and innocent. awesome. nice parallels with life/dreams/river/hill

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

16 posted 2004-01-03 08:28 AM

But clear, with the crystal tears of innocent times,
Where the dreams were lived and the promises made.

Welcome to Passions.

Beautiful, insightful poem. I especially love the above lines ... look at it as the situation of NOW.

Love, Margherita

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