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Dark Angel
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0 posted 2003-12-28 07:05 AM



crapola ....

let’s make way to the lighthouse
where the waves will lap up your
tea-cup cheeks and saucer lips

mother .....

sigh ....

watch out my child-sized friend of many faces
with as many places up your sleeve
be sure to watch out for the mermaids won‘t you?

they’re not so legendary ....
                                          yanno?

scatter-heart ....

don’t let the darkness break you
signal that trumpet over the horizon
it’s only your ghost passing the
breath of sea

and you have seen ....
many a jilted bride in soaked cloth haven’t you?
(don’t deny it)
no point in rocking your head
bobbing it like a  mocker seahorse
in your aquarium world
                    you little sea-urchin you

c’mon  ....?

count the steps  .... one, two, three, four
the first to the top is a rotten  ....


yup

and I’m a priceless baboon.

"I can't believe
I've lost the very best of me"

Natalie Merchant


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Margherita
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1 posted 2003-12-28 07:16 AM


That's a powerful, enchanting, playful way to the lighthouse ...
and now I know what a "baboon" is ...
Smiling.
Love, Margherita

harash
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2 posted 2003-12-28 07:22 AM


Lovely and playful write..

always harash

Sunshine
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3 posted 2003-12-28 09:01 AM



Library....
with questions.  
Smiling...

Martie
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4 posted 2003-12-28 10:05 AM


Maree...What a lovely write, as always!  
Midnitesun
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Gaia
5 posted 2003-12-28 10:19 AM


oh, this one tosses my thoughts about like an angry wave with no shore to slam into

damn

Aimster
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6 posted 2003-12-28 11:00 AM


loved the light airy feel to this one
Maree, as always, I'm impressed!

hugs,
Amy

"When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter"

Aenimal
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7 posted 2003-12-28 01:21 PM


I like this bella..biting, this one is
hugs

BluesSerenade
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8 posted 2003-12-28 04:44 PM


You've got so much style, Maree~
I felt an innocence in your words
as well as some deeply rooted emotions.

Happy New Year, sweetie~

Severn
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9 posted 2003-12-28 05:25 PM


Bloody hell woman! Give me some of your writing juice...

Big hugs...I like it...I'm going to pick your brain over it later...(what's crapola?)

love you

SB

Jamie
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10 posted 2003-12-28 10:14 PM


What she ^^^ said.

Some really good lines in this Mmy-- maybe you can 'splain them to me soon--lol

hugs
J

Dark Angel
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11 posted 2003-12-28 10:45 PM


Thank you all so very much..

K? Jamie? not sure I can explain it, it just had to come out... must've been the cicada's chirping in the mountains yesterday sighhh might go back actually.

Once again.. thanks all so very much for your lovely replies.

Maree

"I can't believe
I've lost the very best of me"

Natalie Merchant


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12 posted 2003-12-30 09:51 AM


Ow, you messed with my head from first line to last....and made me like it!

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Cpat Hair
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13 posted 2003-12-30 12:14 PM


don’t let the darkness break you
signal that trumpet over the horizon
it’s only your ghost passing the
breath of sea

and you have seen ....
many a jilted bride in soaked cloth haven’t you?
(don’t deny it)
no point in rocking your head


as usual... very well done.. and it leaves me in envy of your talent

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14 posted 2003-12-30 12:25 PM


cool
Mistletoe Angel
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15 posted 2004-01-24 05:22 PM




(smiles) Yay! I'm so happy I uncovered this gem of yours, sweet friend, I was in Missouri during the New Years holiday and missed it! (big angel hugs) What a trip, sweet friend, the imagery is powerful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Maree, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

vlraynes
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16 posted 2004-01-25 02:26 AM



Wow... there's a reason I've missed
reading you...and this is it... smile...

Love this, Maree... hugs...

"When the power of love overcomes the love
of power the world will know peace."
--Jimi Hendrix

Tiersdin
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17 posted 2004-05-01 07:47 PM


Maree, the more complex and thought provoking the better.  I love writing as the mood hits, but it never comes out as good as this...

To the library with this series!

~Tier

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