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i'm sorry for this song
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i'm sorry for this song |
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mytuesdaywishes Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 254a voice from the musicbox 
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i've ripped out my tearducts you shivered me warm i am a snowglobe this is my storm i hear of you often i talk of you more i think of you indifferent than i did before know this dear we've been headcases all along this page is melting i'm sorry for this song paint me pretty create acid rain carry my boulders ignore all my stains forge this heartache from nothing but spine i took all your flaws to make up for mine know this dear we've been dying all along this ghost is waiting i'm sorry for this song i followed your dreams you erased the stars i am a cellmate these are my bars i remember you happy i dream of you less i envision you whole in your black concert dress know this dear we've been ablaze all along this year is jaded i'm sorry for this song know this dear we've been untouchable all along this beauty is wasted i'm sorry for this song joy has its own justice. and dreams are languid and lawless. and everything bows to beauty, when it's fierce and when it's flawless... [This message has been edited by mytuesdaywishes (12-28-2003 03:25 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
kinda cool...sad, but cool |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
sad indeed, but a brilliant write/song this flowed very freely and I liked the sincere honest quality about it! well done... Take care, Amy  "When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter" |
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Morcastlin Member
since 2002-01-14
Posts 244The Jersey Shore, USA |
Sad, yet groovin' along. I liked the quirky flow, it worked for this piece and your fresh wording gave it much depth and character. Love, Bonnie |
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