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Troubled Waters |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA 
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How may times have I let you go, my friend? Yet, you, like the ripples the pebble makes in water, circle again and again and distort the picture of myself inside my soul. These waters, once so smooth and still, will they ever calm and quiet down? Your smiles, your frowns, they stir and turn me. Your fears, your joys, you drop inside me . . . . skip across me . . . . and you leave me then alone. Iliana [This message has been edited by iliana (12-27-2003 11:37 PM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Very few people have had that effect on me. But the ones who have? They must have left permanent ripples in my subconscious mind, for this write triggered a couple of deep memories. Which means of course, the writer did an excellent job of drawing out my emotions.   |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Midenitesun -- thank you for the compliment -- hope the memories are not too painful? lol |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Beautiful....very much so. So true of the ripples that start...slowly spreading, rebounding...returning...eventually dying.. Very nicely written, thanx Iliana... from another Texan...transplanted to SC... I miss my Mexican Food!! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Magnus -- thank you for reading and the sweet words. It helps to be encouraged! I bet you do miss the Mexican food. There are so many good restaurants in Houston -- one of the big advantages of being here! But, then again, SC has some pretty good grits, I hear. Hope you have a happy and safe 2004! |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Yet, you, like the ripples the pebble makes in water, circle again and again and distort the picture of myself inside my soul. Nice analogy! i relate to these lines because i so wanna be challenged in this sort of way...i'm getting too complacent for my own good, i think...though i think my sentiments have little to do with your poem...  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Kaile, thanks for reading. Yes, those ripples are important in our lives. Happy 2004 there in Singapore!! |
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C? Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 190 |
round of applause, round of applause |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
C? -- thank you Mr. C. BEEEEEEEwell! |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Yet, you, like the ripples the pebble makes in water, circle again and again and distort the picture of myself inside my soul. iliana, this part really stood out. Very good writing.  Hugs, Ethel |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
ethel -- thanks for saying so. hugs to you! And, a very Happy New Year! |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
How may times have I let you go, my friend? Yet, you, like the ripples the pebble makes in water, circle again and again and distort the picture of myself inside my soul. I have someone like this. Wish sometimes he knew when not to come back. Loved it Dee Stand straight and tall, not the reflection as others see you, but as you truely are. Clearwater |
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harash Member
since 2003-12-27
Posts 99India |
everything ve been said..really a great write.. always harash |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Dee -- thanks so much. Happy New Year to you! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
harash -- you are very kind, thank you. Happy 2004! |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Iliana Such beautiful words that tugged at my heartstrings. I hope you have a wonderful New Year filled with much love and happiness. Take care.......Sue I am in motion |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Yes, I once knew this...I remember. Yet since the ripples have disappeared as he did he, I see my soul clearly again, and for the first time, I like what I see. An excellent write, Iliana, one that made me look at where I have been. Patricia |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Suetang -- thank you for saying so. You have a wonderful new year 2004, as well! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Patricia -- Thanks so much for taking the time to read it. I'm better now, too! Although every now and then I do think about this one. BEEEE well and have a happy new year! |
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jaicie114 Senior Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 750On the edge of forever |
Iliana... This is so beautiful, filled with incredible images! Thank you so much for sharing it. Love and Light...jc This I know as Truth...we are all Beings of Light. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
jaicie114 -- thank you for reading it! Hope all's well your way..........lol, jo |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
This is simply beautiful! Do you mind if I keep it in my library? Extremely well penned. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ In the midst of winter.. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Sweet Enchantress, I am flattered! Certainly, you may! lol........jo |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Your smiles, your frowns, they stir and turn me. Your fears, your joys, you drop inside me . . . . skip across me . . . The sea will forever remain a mystery to me, perhaps that is why I am drawn to it. It emotes as well as eludes so many emotions. Beautiful poetry, iliana~ |
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Bonnie j Senior Member
since 2003-06-27
Posts 1588Ohio |
Liked the poem. We all have so many ripples in our life.People come and go and once in awhile sometimes touches us so deeply we have memories for a lifetime.Maybe the memory may bring a tear, or a smile, or bring up anger that we have buried deep within our mind. Looking forward to more of your works. Love Bon-Bon  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
BlueSerenade -- your comment was as poetic as anything I could have written. Thank you so much! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
BonBon--so glad you read the poem and want to read more. It's nice to positive feeback. Your comment confirmed the meaning so well. lol and Happy New Year! |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
iliana, As I skim a stone across the water, I send you a "Bump!" I love this poem! It's simple, but says so much! Yet, you, like the ripples the pebble makes in water, circle again and again Happy new year, iliana! Sadelite [This message has been edited by Sadelite (01-02-2004 10:06 PM).] |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Thanks Sadelite! Haaappppy New Year back! Check out my garden or flannels and jeans when you have a chance, okay....... love ya |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I'd have to agree with you! love it!  "I can't believe I've lost the very best of me" Natalie Merchant [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (01-02-2004 11:58 PM).] |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
DarkAngel -- I can read where you might -- I do believe that things eventually resolve -- and there is peace, at least for a time! Take care and hugs! And, thanks for reading .....jo [This message has been edited by iliana (01-03-2004 12:15 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I do understand, too well |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Very beautiful imagery used to say ... that he still matters ... The longing for peace is expressed powerfully, but the task of restoring calmness is up to you, only you. Love, Margherita |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Passing Shadows -- I can tell you do. Thanks for stopping by and BEEEEEwell. lol |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Margherita -- thanks for your posts and your caring words. lol |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Wonderful! I find myself looking for your name... "if you won't let me fall for you |
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xaos Junior Member
since 2004-01-05
Posts 35 |
This reminds me of an old friend. I think he must have separated from him wife over 10 times, once for as much as 2 years.... be he always took her back..and it always ended the same way. She betrayed him every time. Love the poem, theres something helpless and inevitable about some situations in life you just watch and wonder when its all coming round again. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Susan -- no greater compliment could I receive! Thanks so much! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Xaos -- I have to agree with your comment -- I call it Karma! Thanks for reading! |
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