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Hypnotised in Light
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Hypnotised in Light |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704
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somehow I awoke to find you sleeping just out of reach behind space sleep, when it comes, is a dark place but I can feel you, like half-light, in the dawn when the solitary bird sings at 4am that’s condemnation again distance and waiting - this wait a deeper one than any melancholic charade I thought of you in the theatre last night, away in a cold land, while humidity drained me, and my reaching drained out into the quiet air, so quiet, no one dared breathe as the beacons in middle-earth were lit over mountains I can lay claim to, here in the worlds-end your voice is melody say anything, anything and I’ll rest there, ocean-held, like yesterday at Orewa, under the sun and cumulus clouds drifting [This message has been edited by Severn (12-27-2003 11:24 PM).] |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Was just stopping by on my way to bed and thought I saw the name Severn. What a shock, you post so very little poetry anymore. Too tired to give you a proper reply- but I promise to try later. At first reading, it certainly doesn't disappoint. K poems are always great poems. Still  JThere is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kamla...it's wonderful to see you posting, and this "your voice is melody say anything, anything and I’ll rest there, ocean-held, like yesterday at Orewa, under the sun and cumulus clouds" ..........sigh! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
This entire write is a beautiful *SIGH* of poetry. I sure wish we could get these more often from you. Thank you for sharing this. |
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C? Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 190 |
the imagery here is fantasic and clear. you have good style and theme...not that I know anything about it, but to me it seems taht way |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Hi K, your writings used to leave me with a tingling sense of melancholy and resignedness (is that such a word?)...i find that your more recent writings evoke a more optimistic feeling of the-poet's-cautious-but-still-daring-to-hope ...just wondering if you have noticed and like this evolution? hmmm... Surprisingly, i have no pesky questions for you. haha, i must have improved  i like these lines: in the dawn when the solitary bird sings at 4am and these: the beacons in middle-earth were lit over mountains I can lay claim to, here in the worlds-end it's this sort of little intriguing details that you sprinkle (quite liberally sometimes, to the confusion of the reader  ) all over your poetry that makes it exceptional and distinct from the rest[This message has been edited by kaile (12-28-2003 12:22 AM).] |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
your voice is melody say anything, anything and I’ll rest there, ocean-held, like yesterday at Orewa, under the sun and cumulus clouds drifting Kamla, I really could feel this ending. Thanks for sharing this with us.  Hugs, Ethel |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Yes I agree with Jamie; K poems ARE always great. Nice to see you posting again Kamla, will there be more? Maree "I can't believe |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
I've spent hours trying to find fitting words to reply and describe what this does for me, but again they fail me. I adore this and adore you |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Thanks all...I'll try and get back with individual replies later... R - .........  K |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
i'm hungry for a personal reply... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
K - what a treat to read this...it's high time you were posting more often. We've been dieting far too long without your feasts to savor. What Jamie said... and what Martie said, too... Dittos! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beautiful I can relate well |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
a most welcome poem to read today... Very beautifully expressed. Maureen |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Severn Wonderful to read you again. Hope to see more. Happy New Year |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Okies...personal replies since I've been 'nagged' heh.. Jamie - you and I both know what this means, so thank you for your reply, because, well because. Here I am again, my friend, on the long road. And they're NOT always great sheesh...~poke~ hugs...thank you. MLP - thank you...I know you know etc etc...sigh. 'Love Is Ridiculous' - lets write it soon ok? Midnite - well, recently, something happened that has enabled me to write, if tentatively, so who knows haha...thank you... C? - I'm sure you know more about poetry than you think...grins (ack, did I just say grins??? sorry lol)...anyway, thank you, I appreciate your words... Heeeeello Mr Nag, er I mean Another K - 'more recent writings'? snort, yeah all two of them! Anyway, how be you? Nice to catch up again... 'poet's-cautious-but-still-daring-to-hope'...well that's definitely present in this poem, that's for sure. Like the evolution? It's scary to feel this way, and to write this way - to be blunt. Shrug, life's a cliff... Where are my pesky questions dammit! I'd relied on you for that grrrrrrr...j/k... thank you for your reply, you know I always appreciate your input...big HUGS... Hey Ethel...hugs back, thanks for reading...I'm glad you could feel it..I certainly can lol... Mmy - god, I don't know. Honestly, this extended writer's block is a killer...it'll take a lot of change to get me there again I think, who knows...thank you sweetie...(oh and repeat what I said to J - no they're not...) Raph - well...just read the first two again k? And I hope that today when you sat in your own theatre and saw the beacons you knew precisely why that image found its way into this poem...I'm sure you would have, it's like that...thank you for your reply, that honesty that I love.  Kari - blush...thank you, you're such a sweetheart and always so supportive of whatever drivel I pour out...like I said to Maree though...could be awhile...Heart-hugs... Ms Shadows...how are you?? Trust you're well...thank you for stopping in hon... Maureen - glad it found you today then Thanks muchly...Sy! - Hey you! How goes life sir? And a very happy new year to you as well..even though I'll beat ya lmao...hugs and thank yous... K[This message has been edited by Severn (12-30-2003 04:54 PM).] |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
"somehow I awoke to find you sleeping just out of reach behind space" I know this waking...every night of the world I know it. Close can be so far, and distance sometimes is merely space with no separation at all. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Oh Ed, yes I know. Distance is more than a length of miles, and sometimes...sometimes a length of miles means NOTHING at all...yes, I know indeed. Big hugs, thank you for replying... K |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Ah! What a pleasure... I feel quite lucky with the fact that I returned here after a gap of more than a month, perhaps... and am able to read one of your writes... that's a great thing, I tell you. regards sudhir p.s. ... and perhaps it is me, but by 'theatre' did you mean a movie hall or a performance arts place? I thought of a movie hall and that you were watching some part of LOTR (possibly III) ... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ah Kamla..tis a pleasure to read you again. And this piece is outstanding! A very Happy New year to you and yours. In the midst of winter.. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Suddy! Yay...yes! It is indeed...when the beacons for Gondor are lit and the cameras take one soaring over the mountains...it's amazing, I found it quite profound. The whole theatre stopped breathing it seemed. So nice to see you again my friend...hugs and stuff Nancy - thank you for your very kind words...and may I say the same in regards to the new year.. K |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
You have many posts, but I don't remember seeing you before. I think that means "welcome back"--and if this is a fair sample of your writing, welcome indeed! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
loved it |
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S Arthur Grey Senior Member
since 2001-03-19
Posts 719woven by a poet's loom |
A pleasant surprise! to find your ink again. Enjoyed! Hope there will be more. |
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Laoha Member
since 2003-03-07
Posts 161Nevada, USA |
Severn, your wording so beautifully and with such a profound meaning. This is "zen" all about. |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Severn, I love the dreaminess and emotion that your poem evokes in me." your voice is melody say anything, anything and I’ll rest there, ocean-held, like yesterday at Orewa, under the sun and cumulus clouds drifting" It is a wistful reminder of tender touching moments of introspection that we often lose sight of. "sleep, when it comes, is a dark place but I can feel you, like half-light, in the dawn when the solitary bird sings at 4am" Wonderful poetry, open and tender, tender. SG |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"I can feel you, like half-light" Loved the entire poem, but especially loved that phrase... what a vivid portrayal of anticipated longing |
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Ravenwolfvoyager Member
since 2003-12-25
Posts 326 |
Yes this was beautiful!!!!! Outstanding and an honor to read and behold. |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
I really enjoyed this Severn. Thanks for posting it. |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
I had to savor your images over and over before I could respond...something so familiar to me here. I don't believe I've read your work before, but I sure would like the opportunity to savor more. Patricia |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Thank you all for your kind and supportive words....too tired for personal replies right now lol... Cheers, K |
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