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a poem from a broken heart
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a poem from a broken heart |
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steve New Member
since 2000-08-15
Posts 9Canada |
Im posting this merely for the fact it will help me to share my feelings. its a {edited by moderator...AGAIN} poem i know, so i dont need to be patronized. ty. ~~~ existence without meaning too smart for my own good ive was lost in this world tortured til no end but i met this girl or she found me too good to be true but simply irresistable she gave me hope she gave me love she gave me what i needed to hear she took away my fears but that was then and this is now she broke my heart ruined my whole world when you cannot trust the only one you love spoiling you at first its a kick to the nuts but woe is me im lost again do i have the strength to cope or is this going to be the bitter end? [This message has been edited by garysgirl (12-27-2003 09:05 AM).] |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
give yourself credit, you are writing an emotion we all deal with....I KNOW exactly how this feels (present day) hugsssss for brighter tomorrows... Lauren~ This morning there’s a calm |
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WannabePoet Member
since 2003-12-10
Posts 62New York USA |
Writing with emotion, can be very draining. Or it can be very theraputic, it all depends on how we look at it. Your words flow nicely, and the point is very well brought home. May the passion ever flow through your pen. Tobi  |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
This emotion you share is entwined with trimmings of anger and sorrow... You did well to find words that described and opened the wound. The surgery is difficult, but then there is healing. TD |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
How can a broken heart be judged? You cannot measure pain, because you cannot measure love..... You heart was crying and I listened to every word.... Dry your tears....the sun will shine another day....see the rainbow through the rain! You expressed pain well with your poem. Was that gentle enough? ~ARH  Open your eyes, open your mind, open your heart, let me come in and show you love.....~ARH [This message has been edited by A Romantic Heart (12-27-2003 03:18 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you have the strength  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
arghh Dontcha hate that feeling? that this really IS the last straw? maybe time and distance will sweep that feeling away and the chaffing will subside. good luck |
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harash Member
since 2003-12-27
Posts 99India |
steve its a beautiful piece... Harash |
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Michelle_loves_Mike
since 2003-12-20
Posts 1189Pennsylvania |
that is a kick,,even the ladies can feel Michelle I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hi Steve It is so obvious that this was written on pure emotion and it takes courage to do that. It is so important to let it out and writing is the best way to do that. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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Ravenwolfvoyager Member
since 2003-12-25
Posts 326 |
Yes I understand, sometimes love can see as evil is evil. I've understood where you are coming from. Why do most devastating life events have some affiliation with love. There are thorns in the flower. Remember to be yourself. Your thoughts, your emotions, your negatives and your positives are all what make you who you are...love thy self. Very well done my friend. [This message has been edited by Ravenwolfvoyager (12-27-2003 04:12 PM).] |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Steve It is too easy to go for everything and everyone when it goes bad. It is too bloody easy to do it. You dont need people telling you it will be ok, and all the "other Fish in the Sea" business, since the nets have been out since before you got up". NO existence is without meaning and chancing your hand in romance is something, you are sometimes expected to do. The difference is knowing when you should and if you ever work it out, let the rest of us know. Look mate, once of the nicer things that keeps you together with a woman is the thought than you dont have to go through meeting and winning her again, which is what you are suffering from. Someone said to me you look at them in the morning and you "Love them or You Dont". The number of times I've wanted to have a quiet work with this guy are legand. No words get you out of it; no words take away the pain. Only you can do that but dont let a lack of language prevent from doing so. You dont expect them to be with you when you are with a woman, dont take it outside. Two people in a relationship, apart from the relatives, lawyers etc. regards Dave |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
steve Perhaps bittersweet, enjoyed. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
steve, honest sincere write, no one can fault you for that! take care, amy |
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