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Sunset Sail |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~ I received your disclaimer saying you were releasing all ties referring to love in the past tense the final footnote in fine print explaining how things have changed due to circumstances beyond our control. There is safety in numbers and distance between oceans set apart like night and day that falls into gray hovers like a cloud cover hanging over head hold on or let go, row your own boat stay afloat and weather the stormy seas. I had hoped for a bond unbroken as if love comes with a lifetime guarantee a sunset sail for all my days and so it goes. I pray the water stays calm so I can move on and get past this without pushing it to the limit that might kill the motor and leave me stranded for good. I've read your words over and over in order to map out a clear picture letting go of my resistance it's easier this way without the push and pull and endless navigation. I'll be back again someday you say but we both know better you always knew which way the wind blew and how to carry me best like all things nothing ever remains the same. So like the wind love has a way of changing direction reluctantly I signed in agreement accepting your terms because I know without a doubt if you should have a change of heart I won't be that faraway I'll be wading by the sea where we left off. ~*~ [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (12-16-2003 03:22 AM).] |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Bluesy... You have done it again! I believe the sea began from the droplet in your palm. Beautiful. TD |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"I'll be wading by the sea where we left off." Very clever! What sadness. Hope you find a shade tree while you are wading . . . iliana |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
It seems like it gets easier each time...the goodbye...and it seems like by the time the other person has a change of heart, you have changed your mind  don't "wade" around for too long |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Oh, Lori, this is sad. But, you sound as if you have faith that he will be back. I hope he will be, if that's what you want, sweet lady. Hugs,  |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
I'll be wading by the sea where we left off. wading, coasting, taking the storms on, youre the bluesgirl, you'll come up safe to shore, i can be sure of that very beauitful poem, such deep heartfelt expression, it makes me want to copycat again, but i wont, just so inspiring you are |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
lori, no one does this better than you! you write your heart so clearly and beautifully. I think I've said it a few times before, but I'll say it again...I truly admire you sweet lady! take care and happy holidays, amy "love is like a butterfly-- |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
You have done it again Lori,your feelings of sadness so beautifully written Hope |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I pray the water stays calm so I can move on and get past this'''' ~~~ mind if I sail with ya??? I Know this....I am heading right into the "storm" myself...I can relate...HUGSSSSS Lovely Lady..... Lauren~ ~~**~~**~~**~~**~~ |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
hey BluesSerenade, this is a sad one. But the sadness seems to be laced with hope and courage. "I pray the water stays calm so I can move on". Nice write. poe If nothing is something |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you all for reading me sappy! *cringe* it helps to type it out, but I'll be damned if I lose sight of all direction. It's just a poem, doncha know... uh huh, uh huh!! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Don't wander too far by the waves.... and don't turn your back on them.... No point in tempting some rogue to knock you over. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
So...it's only rock and roll...but I like it! |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
The ending of this poem, along with some unwritten things I've learned of you, inspired me to write. /pip/Forum83/HTML/001360.html Then I didn't respond to the poem that started my own. Let me fix that right now. |
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