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Daddy Warned Her
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Daddy Warned Her |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri 
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Daddy Warned Her Daddy warned her, but her Catholic school uniform persona was in search of glitter Metallic blue,302 caught her eye and captured her essence Engine idling, she, a beautiful Mustang in search of freeway freedom, willing to pay the price... Breaking commandments, and Daddy’s heart, She shifted into high gear, setting abandon ablaze, leaving behind a graffiti trail of burnt rubber, “I was here,” heard ‘round every corner in squeal’s peel. Leaving school girl innocence in the dust of open road, she heads for fast lane crash ‘n burn Absent repent, Daddy’s warning distant in her rear view... |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"She shifted into high gear, setting abandon ablaze, leaving behind a graffiti trail of burnt rubber, “I was here,” heard ‘round every corner in squeal’s peel." When I was a kid, my mother used to threaten to send me to Catholic school when I acted up. I just grinned and thought, "Cool, that's where all the fun girls are!" Sorry Patricia, the warning is lost on me, too...but loved the poetic graffiti.  |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Daddy warned her, but her Catholic school uniform persona was in search of glitter ~*~ and was the glitter silver? or gold... or the spark of blue? Well done, Patricia. [Now, how soon before youngest daughter warms to the forums???...it's never too soon, y'know...  ] |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Patricia how masterfully you caught this atmosphere! Love, Margherita  |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Hi Patricia, When I first started reading this, I thought you were writing about your daughter. But then I realized you were writing about your own youth. Hey, there’s only so much a parent can do, right? I think that free minded, and independent spirit wears well on you! And I can just see you taking the reins of that untamed stallion, breaking him, to submit to your wild abandon...lol I bet you broke more hearts, then you will ever know! This was rather spicy for a Sunday morning. I Love it! Great to see you, back in the saddle again Patricia! This was great! Richy |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I knew...as soon as you mentioned the car.... that this was YOU!!!! I think most all of us have had that blood in our veins at one time or another... Nicely written....personal...yet so true of many.... Moi? of course... |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
this brought back some memories for me and a smile! wonderful write. thank you. take care. amy "love is like a butterfly-- |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Patricia, I related very much to the car and, Dad's warning, and the fast lane. My Daddy always threatened me with youth detention school, but never did send me. He still tries to warn me about things. LOL A very good poem, Patricia. You had me there.  Hugs  Ethel |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (giggles in delight) I believe to truly live you have to be respectful and responsible but I also believe you have to be daring and a little reckless! (smiles) Who could blame someone for wanting to have just a little fun, hehehe, I just love your sass and wit here, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Patricia, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
 heh And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!" |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I used to take Daddy's car into the fast lane  heh.I enjoyed this muchly Patricia, it's always a pleasure reading you m'dear Maree. fate is not just whose cooking smells good but which way the wind blows (Ani DiFranco) [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (09-28-2003 04:38 PM).] |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I learned how to drive a standard on a Mustang...later I fell in love with the power of a '69 GTO.. I know the feel.. Susan |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
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dingusjr Member
since 2003-09-24
Posts 415Missouri |
Daddy's warning is always in the rear view when you are about 17..... Thanks for a great poem! Larry |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Patricia, ahh you brought me there you did . . . but you see? I blame it on the whole Catholic school thing for my rebellious nature as a child (that is my story and I am sticking with it) *smile* I adored this awesome writing, again xxoo |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Patricia, you have been conspicuous by your absence!!! --and after having read this delightful outpouring of ink, I believe I missed you even more than I thought! I love the nostalgia, spirit and spunk of this write!  Loving hugs and smiles across the miles, EA |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(chuckling)... shame on you..such a bad girl to ignore dad... Now me, I was the poster child for heeding the warnings of my elders... shucks... I didn't even get married until I was 16... can't believe you acted so impulsively as a youth... |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
This is very well done, and a great memory for all of us who looked for the glitter when we were kids... uh... except for me.. I loved Sr. Mary Agony and her steel ruler... uh... Did I just say that??? lol Great job. We are all equal but we’re individually different |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
enjoyed your penning n read very much,,, |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Beautifull done -- I feel as if I know her -- and wish I had, at eighteen...... |
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