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Margot
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since 2003-10-04

Posts 154

0 posted 2003-11-22 10:59 PM

Angel dance (a Villanelle)

On angel wings we waltz divine
As we dance to the midnight moon
Within his glance a light does shine

Two beating hearts do now entwine
Wrapped in a sweet cocoon
On angel wings we waltz divine

As he touched his hand to mine
My soul began to swoon
Within his glance a light does shine

As we are dancing on cloud nine
A balladeer starts to croon
On angel wings we waltz divine

Commit my love unto his shrine
Though others may say too soon
Within his glance a light does shine

Deep in his eyes a sweet life line
The choir does sing in tune
On angel wings we waltz divine
Within his glance a light does shine

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

1 posted 2003-11-22 11:02 PM

I enjoyed this. Villanelles are one of my favorite forms, but they make me tear my hair out when I try writing them. It's so hard to make the third line sound as if it naturally falls.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Kahlil
Senior Member

since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

2 posted 2003-11-22 11:05 PM

Now this is a work of art! I have never tried to write a villanelle, and it doesn't look easy, but yours just waltzed across the page... ~K~

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

3 posted 2003-11-22 11:06 PM

What a beautiful piece of art....I look forward to more....

Welcome to Passions...We are glad you are here....Please check your email for a special greeting.....
Greeneyes~

I had a dream last night
you came to me on silver wings of light
I flew away with you in painted sky
Was it real
Is it what you see,touch or feel

Margot
Member

since 2003-10-04

Posts 154

4 posted 2003-11-22 11:09 PM

Nan,

Thank you very much, it is a difficult form for me to read smoothly but I enjoyed trying to get it to work.

Margot

Margot
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since 2003-10-04

Posts 154

5 posted 2003-11-22 11:15 PM

Kahlil & Greeneyes,

Thank you both very much. I signup right before the boards crashed and got distracted. I hope to be posting more now that I've rediscovered this forum.

Margot

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

6 posted 2003-11-22 11:28 PM

Welcome to Passions, Margot! You started off with a beauty! I'm with Pilgrimage, I love villanelles, but I'm nearly bald by the time I finish writing one! lol

You did a wonderful job writing yours!

Warm, welcoming hugs,
Earth Angel

Margot
Member

since 2003-10-04

Posts 154

7 posted 2003-11-22 11:31 PM

Earth Angel,

Thank you very much for the compliment and the welcome.

Margot

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

8 posted 2003-11-22 11:44 PM

Welcome! I enjoyed this. Even after being here two years, I haven't dared attempt this structured style.

Margot
Member

since 2003-10-04

Posts 154

9 posted 2003-11-22 11:52 PM

Midnitesun,

Thank you very much

Margot

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

10 posted 2003-11-23 02:27 AM

Enjoyed...James

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

11 posted 2003-11-23 03:56 AM

BRAVO!

Margot
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since 2003-10-04

Posts 154

12 posted 2003-11-23 07:21 AM

James & passing shadows

Thank you both very much

Margot

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

13 posted 2003-11-23 09:11 AM

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!
Very very beautiful entrance presentation.
I look forward to more of your work.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before~

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

14 posted 2003-11-23 09:50 AM

Yes, nice accomplishment.  For one can
struggle with the lines.  You have done
very well.  Welcome to Passions.

Margot
Member

since 2003-10-04

Posts 154

15 posted 2003-11-23 11:00 AM

Nancy & Magnus,

Thank you very much

Margot

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