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Open Poetry #29

monay babay

duncan idaho
Member

since 2003-11-14

Posts 70
dune

0 posted 2003-11-19 02:39 PM

a path

I am the middle of the
middle
Class.
Content
Casual
Complete
With my starbucks bitch
and a mind full of
[Edited by Moderator] .
I soak compasionate
conservative
Nonsense, and
live the dream.
yes, the dream.
forced into my
being by blind bigot banter.
I took the path more traveled by,
and it has eaten my introspective soul.

[This message has been edited by Enchantress (11-19-2003 03:13 PM).]

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

1 posted 2003-11-20 07:37 AM

I don't see another comment here yet? and I don't know why?
This poem is modern and upbeat, reminds me of Bukowski or Ken Patchen in the mid twentieth century....keep writting in your style, it worked very well for them...

Anyway, I enjoyed this poem, hope to see more from you...

______ice
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Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2003-11-20 07:43 AM

duncan idaho
Well done, enjoyed the read.

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

3 posted 2003-11-20 08:15 AM

I took the path more traveled by,
and it has eaten my introspective soul.

All to often the path more traveled is the one taken and in the end unhappiness prevails. Very well written.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2003-11-20 01:57 PM

I never could aquire the taste for Starbucks but it's a good place to be when waiting on a flight at Dulles International

this poem rocks!

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

5 posted 2003-11-20 02:57 PM

Duncan m'friend?
I knew someone with a simiar malady (mal lady?) He found himself in a shack, perched on a small river.

I'd like to think that he's the better for it.

muchos
Member

since 2003-11-29

Posts 102

6 posted 2003-12-27 01:15 PM

call me stupid and shoot me dead for this was something i do not dread keep it and and make me smile i love your poems, its all worth while

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