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Nicole (Manifestation of Female Form Into Poetic Form)
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Nicole (Manifestation of Female Form Into Poetic Form) |
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LiquidMidnight Member
since 2003-09-24
Posts 50 |
Nicole (Manifestation of Female Form Into Poetic Form) Enarmored by the innocent tide Wrapped the form of her body into the form of this verse And that all of Shakespearean lullaby have since dried Her sensual empiricism, I do emmerse She wandered under heavenly eros of the moon Spinning webs from my discarded desires But silken sorrow does not purify to bloom And ink spilled across this canvas must be dramatized to inspire So let a trickle of piano synergize with her mood As I may arrange her body atop the cabinet lid Letting the display classically objectify her poetic form in the nude For any allegations to romantic enchantment, she has long since hid |
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IndigoEve Member
since 2003-01-10
Posts 279Etched in the illusion of time |
oh..my..thats just-WOW. For saints have hands that pilgrims' hands do touch, |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
This would have a hard beat to it if it were me.It would make for a great song and is a teriffic read.  Crystal |
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Insomniac Cat Member
since 2003-09-23
Posts 69The Land of the Dadaists |
Eloquent, I like it! Flows very well. [This message has been edited by Insomniac Cat (09-26-2003 07:43 PM).] |
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LiquidMidnight Member
since 2003-09-24
Posts 50 |
Thank you for all of the thoughts. Crystal, thank you for reading into the meter/rythm. It originally started out as a sonnet, but I liked the direction that it went into instead, so I chopped the sonnet idea, and went with what you see here. Again, thank you for the replies. |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well what I see (and read) is spectacular! Sometimes it is better to break the form and go with your heart, as you did here, because the end result was simply stunning. Kudos! |
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n2dmystic Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 253beyond the doors of perception |
"Her sensual empiricism, I do emmerse" I too am an empiricist. Gotta experience it, yuh know ;-}. good write. Peace, Joe seeking the serendipitous magical mysteries of life's ubiquitous twisteries |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Agreeing here with Mysteria...this was great! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is beautiful, sweet friend, I too agree the bes tthing about poetry is you can write from your heart free as can be so I too believe if you don't feel you can express in form, just let it all out the way you want! (big hugggssssss) This is so romantic, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Midnight (adore your name) Welcome to PIP! Sorry I missed your entrance I must say this is indeed liquid . . . flowing from the screen . . . Beautiful imagery and writing xxoo |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Goodness... incredible write! Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. |
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