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Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2003-11-17 01:44 PM

A Slow Fall

There are years, around here,
when fall doesn’t fall…
it flies by
on zephyr wings
and arctic breath

when Summer jumps into Winter
as if invited to a polar swim fest
where men play like bears
with little sense ~

some years.

Not always.

This is a molasses kind of year,
running slow, almost late, as if there were
no time like the present,

as if there were one more ball to attend,
a special sort of ball,
where one dresses in grand style,

with beaus all standing around
just waiting for her grand entrance
she, the debutante,
who arrives,
in red,

just because the color suits her
and she glows
with all of summer’s warm
held within…

where she will dance the night away
before the clock strikes 12
before the magic subsides
before the kiss of crystal ice
and the beaus hold their breath
with the wind’s tease of shimmy…

and its icy gasp shrivels the thread of each bit of lace,
allowing all to fall around her ankles,

just after
her last dance of summer.

~*~

Re-dedicated to Nancy Ness

Brad Majors

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Georgia

1 posted 2003-11-17 01:46 PM

well done

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

2 posted 2003-11-17 01:57 PM

ohhh, you have launched me into fairyland ... how beautiful, dear Karilea!
Love and hugs. Margherita

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

3 posted 2003-11-17 02:05 PM

Oh, how beautiful Karilea! Takes me to another time and place. Thankyou. hugs, Chris

Let your life lightly dance on the edges of Time like dew on the tip of a leaf. -Tagore

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

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Canada eh.

4 posted 2003-11-18 10:56 AM

How did I ever miss this beauty???!!!
WOW! The words..the colour..spectacular!
I love this...and hereby deem it a keeper!!
Love ya lady!
Hugs~

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before~

Copperbell
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since 2003-11-08

Posts 956

5 posted 2003-11-18 11:00 AM

I liked it - made me think of home, of the wonder of the season change. Especially when you get to hold on to the warmth of summer just a little bit longer - when you get to be warm just a little bit longer and you're thankful for that.

Jes
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since 2003-10-21

Posts 422
Denmark

6 posted 2003-11-18 11:21 AM

This was just, yes i liked it wery much but first when i get to the bottom, i could collect all the wievs in it and see why taht tree was put in there.

After the fall she will stand proud in just what belongs to her and her beauty.

Smile i loved it

Jes

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

7 posted 2003-11-18 03:38 PM

Oh, wow! I think this is my favorite of yours; it is exquisite. I am wondering, ever so slightly, though, near the end you use the word gasp when I was expecting grasp. Both work there, I'm just too curious not to ask.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

James_A_Fraser
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since 2003-09-03

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Out Making Anticlines

8 posted 2003-11-18 03:48 PM

And isn't it pure poetry that it's the sugar maple who wears the brightest red? Couldn't be cottonwood or hickory or elm, it had to be the one with the sweetest sugar in her veins.....

~~J

wandering glider
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since 2001-04-04

Posts 501
aloft

9 posted 2003-11-18 04:01 PM

Enjoyed.
Didn't happen that way here this year, so this was nice to read.
Appreciate your seasonal sensitivity.

-glider-

Sadelite
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since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

10 posted 2003-11-18 04:15 PM

Sunshine,
Ya did it again! Wow... You escort people through time and travel. As you so creatively pointed out, Summer to Winter can be one fast trip! I so enjoy your writing.
Sadelite

Kaoru

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where the wild flowers grow

11 posted 2003-11-18 04:16 PM

This is beauty...

the picture is, too.

steavenr
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12 posted 2003-11-18 04:18 PM

A very tighly written, beautiful poem, with transitions that captured imagery so very smoothly. Lovely.

Greeneyes

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In Your Poetic Mind

13 posted 2003-11-18 05:26 PM

Sigh
so lovely....wow Karilea~
Lauren~

~~**~~

I had a dream last night
you came to me on silver wings of light
I flew away with you in painted sky
Was it real
Is it what you see,touch or feel

kayjay
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since 2002-06-24

Posts 2015
Oregon

14 posted 2003-11-18 05:54 PM

This poem brings me an eternal thankfulness for the beauty of each season. KJ

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

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New York

15 posted 2003-11-18 05:57 PM

Good God Kari . .
this is amazing

This is a molasses kind of year,
running slow, almost late, as if there were
no time like the present,

YES and this entire write
dripped right off of this page
xxoo

Beautiful dedication

SimplyGold
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16 posted 2003-11-18 06:17 PM

Great imagery. I loved it..

SG

hoot_owl_rn
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Glen Hope, PA USA

17 posted 2003-11-18 08:41 PM

Applauding very loudly...can you hear me all the way from PA? Excellent imagery transporting the reader into the poem. Wonderful write

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