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Sparticus Member
since 2003-11-15
Posts 245 |
I digest the clocks like tiny white pills washed down with dark brooding. The doors are open, scabs of light smite the cresting carpet waving over the blue sky. My scared fingers cramp on distant tunes played in melodious pinks for you to fall into. My heart heaves with the time, my lungs barely breath in your scent, my eyes burn to recall your face. As if forgetting to tell you I love you, my mind races to recount your final wave that scattered me like drift wood. Chocolate tints move my lips to speak, words tumble like wet boulders crawling down my chin, I strain to hear. If only I could replay the smell of your first smile, the mood of your walk, how red your eyes became when I said I needed you. And once you became mine, I wore you like a skin so I could kiss your scent in tune with my pain. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Welcome and I hope you stay a looong time! stunning work. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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wandering glider Senior Member
since 2001-04-04
Posts 501aloft |
Gotta agree with Kethry! Excellent first post, hope there is lots more to come. Esp. like: "to recount your final wave that scattered me like drift wood." -glider- |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I know lots about bitter pills Welcome to Passions!  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions, Sparticus. I hope you find your way around our many blue halls, but if you should have any questions, please do not hesitate to ask. Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen? |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Love it! Welcome to Passions Sparticus. Hope to see more like this in the future. Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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Sparticus Member
since 2003-11-15
Posts 245 |
Thank you all for your wonderful comments...You make me feel right at home! I will be reading more as well, an excellent group of writers here. Even with insects- |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sparticus~ An official WELCOME is in order from me on your first post~ YOU are extremely talented and versatile ... I believe many of us are going to enjoy reading you~ 'As if forgetting to tell you I love you, my mind races to recount your final wave that scattered me like drift wood.' Oh yeah~  *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
   (big hugggsssssss) This is a wonderful debut, dearest friend, I love all the imagery and metaphors that make the vision come alive like a soap opera turning point, this is excellent, I love it! Welcome to Passions, sweet Sparticus, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your wondrous poetry, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sparticus, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
And once you became mine, I wore you like a skin so I could kiss your scent in tune with my pain. Great first post! Welcome to Passions ! Chris  Let your life lightly dance on the edges of Time like dew on the tip of a leaf. -Tagore |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Welcome to Passions! Excellent first post.. I look forward to seeing more of your work. Please check your email for a special greeting. Nancy~ |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
pleasurable reading~ M |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Oh my...I felt this down to every little pore..how soon till you post another? Welcome to Passions! Susan "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"If only I could replay the smell of your first smile, the mood of your walk, how red your eyes became when I said I needed you. And once you became mine, I wore you like a skin so I could kiss your scent in tune with my pain." ~ You certainly have my attention, poet man! Welcome to Passions! I do believe you have come to the "write" place!   Earth Angel |
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