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Still breathing.... |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you 
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 I’m still breathing.......after all these years time kept on moving......but I’m not out of tears I hold my breath sometimes.....because it’s you, I breath in each exhale hoping.......for the healing to begin they said it would get better.......oh, but they were wrong without you beside me.......forever is too damn long each new dawn brings that ache......that just won’t subside they said my life would go on.......but it seems to me, they lied I don’t focus on the future......I reminisce in yesterday when I was blind to the notion......you could ever go away and baby, I’m still breathing......until this life of mine is through as it was before you left me.....I remain, the one in love with you ~SEA~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you just broke my heart  |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Susan, this is so sad but beautiful, sweet friend, the form here is splendid, it is as though the break between each line with the ellipses represents that chasm, like your heart being a fjord that longs to have a bridge of hope closing it! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, I send many angel hugs your way, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Susan, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
hugsss lady.....so beautifully sad... Lauren~ i carry your heart with me |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SEA~ This has such a quiet beauty to it~ You know that this one knows my heart too~  *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ok, you...with this picture, I want you to rewrite this very poem, using the language that an Indian woman would use knowing that her warrior has perished... double dog dare you...  Enjoying this one, very much! |
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Jes Member
since 2003-10-21
Posts 422Denmark |
SEA -----> Sea of tears ! The thoughts and remembering we shall never forget cause its our heart were it is. Off course we will cry and miss and feel the needs of the love that passed. But....... We have to build up our everyday again and stil be able to enjoy and live, even though our hearts are sad, we can still smile, and live until the day we again shall meet. Tear filled smiles ---- i loved this. Jes [This message has been edited by Jes (11-08-2003 01:27 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Love this Susan! Love your grace and style of writing... ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
An awesome write...love this form...it speaks so clearly and carries the emotions like a firestorm.... Very well done...thanx Sue |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
I keep leaving and coming back to this, thinking that I'll be able to come up with the right the to say, even with how it makes me feel... but I just don't know. It does though... it makes me feel. I Love this. Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Oh my, Susan.....you felt so much in this one that it made me feel so much!! Thank you for sharing this. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Beautiful and sad both Sea. Some people say time heals all. I myself have often questioned it though. Hugs to you |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Awww....this is so soft and yet so sad. I've read it several times and it resonates with many feelings. I love the style with which you wrote this Susan. Huggles, Marti |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Hi Susan! This is a beautiful poem. As well as the picture. |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
All I can say is it's one of those times when you want to speak, but can't because you are choknig back the tears. wow..this must be my night to cry, or pass around the little kissy icon...sending a hug.  Love, Terri~  |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
you know i felt this one girlie-- awesome write...you write ache and sadness unlike any other. take care love ya, amy  "love is like a butterfly-- |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Such a sad poem, SEA, such an old soul in your young voice. Corinne |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Keep breathing and keep writing and I will keep reading Dee PS hope you had a great birthday my fellow scorpio Stand straight and tall, not the reflection as others see you, but as you truely are. Clearwater |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Beautiful piece about the truest love. coyote 8) |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I am with Dixie on this one......library... "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I don’t focus on the future......I reminisce in yesterday when I was blind to the notion......you could ever go away and baby, I’m still breathing......until this life of mine is through as it was before you left me.....I remain, the one in love with you my friend... you left me without words.. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Sweet SEA, your sad song sings mellifluously. Loving hugs, EA |
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