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1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2003-11-15 07:28 PM

What Went Wrong

the first time I ever saw you
I knew that the sight I saw
on the horizon was hiding colors
that was caught between the hues
I tried to swim out to the sea
where the sky touches the water
but the further I went out
the further it moved away from me
are there starless nights
within sleepless dreams
could there be dreams to find us
waking tinted finding morning
gauzed in multi clouded cotton
but you drew lines for me
that I was not allowed to cross
and the sum of whom I am
in words are not enough
and I do not meet your worth
I can be no more than my words
and as simple as they may be
it is all I am
and all that I have to offer
maybe it is an angel you look for
and my wings were lost to my past
yet wingless I still know flight
for I can reach out and touch the sky
your angry disappointment stings
air with surprising lightening
and my heart has learned to rain
and this is something
I do not understand
for all I wanted to do
was move a mountain

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

1 posted 2003-11-15 07:40 PM

"I tried to swim out to the sea
where the sky touches the water
but the further I went out
the further it moved away from me
are there starless nights
within sleepless dreams
could there be dreams to find us
waking tinted finding morning
gauzed in multi clouded cotton"

Love the understatement of the last two lines also Helen. Intense emote, I really enjoyed reading...

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

2 posted 2003-11-15 07:41 PM

Who could not love you????

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

3 posted 2003-11-15 07:55 PM

(sigh) Oh Helen, this is sad, dearest friend, only love can move mountains so move on and find the true sunny side of the beach where all is right! (big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Helen, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

4 posted 2003-11-15 08:06 PM

but you drew lines for me
that I was not allowed to cross
and the sum of whom I am
in words are not enough
and I do not meet your worth
I can be no more than my words
and as simple as they may be
it is all I am
and all that I have to offer
maybe it is an angel you look for
and my wings were lost to my past
yet wingless I still know flight
for I can reach out and touch the sky

OH my goodness!! Aren't you lovely here!!
I'm sorry, but I am completely without words.
Dear Helen, thank you for sharing this beauty.

[This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (11-15-2003 08:10 PM).]

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2003-11-16 02:25 AM

you are loved...never forget that

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

6 posted 2003-11-16 10:36 PM

I can't imagine this happening to you....either your being walled away or your being rejected as not measuring up in some way. From what I know of you, only a fool would do such a thing.

You ought to have a little talk with that benighted chap....

~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº>
______________Ratleader______________

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

7 posted 2003-11-16 10:48 PM

all i wanted to do was to move a mountain

we really should stick with the mole hills perhaps, you know? so less work put into it, just natural as it should be when its right

bslicker

Member Elite

since 2000-12-04

Posts 2321
state of mind

8 posted 2003-11-18 10:59 AM

Bernie

A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

Temptress

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

9 posted 2003-11-19 01:26 AM

*sighing here*
Do a book of poetry? Please?

I LOVE YOU! I LOVE YOU! I LOVE YOU!

beckers716
Junior Member

since 2003-11-16

Posts 39
Ohio

10 posted 2003-11-19 01:38 AM

this is by far one of the most well written poems I've read in years! It really touched me. Thank You!

Only when all hope seems lost, can you hope to find yourself

PouringJewels
Member

since 2003-09-18

Posts 158
Maryland

11 posted 2003-11-19 02:12 AM

"Do not meet your worth" This is only because he is so far beneath you.

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