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Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

0 posted 2003-11-17 05:07 PM

For a little while
I live in the words I write
Yet when that last word
is committed to page
I am left with nothing
but empty heart
and leftover thoughts

Maybe I have lost
the thread
that held the seam
No longer able
to judge right from wrong
good from bad

I wonder if I am a misfit
in a world of fits
or applying too much importance
on self
and the faults
that feel like hooves
In a field of feet

Still I write
Hoping one day
to touch the real
of why, and
understand
meaning behind the words

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

Suetang
Member Ascendant

since 2001-03-07

Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia

1 posted 2003-11-17 05:13 PM

Hello Susan

You really opened up your heart with this piece of writing and I hope that your writing helps you. I know it helps me in more ways than one and I'd be lost without it.

Take care......Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

2 posted 2003-11-17 05:22 PM

I like your poetry, and your thoughts. I think we write because we have to get it out, then we can move on.

Thanks for sharing this.

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

3 posted 2003-11-17 05:27 PM

this time it is my turn to say...
you took the words off of my fingertips

hugs
M

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

4 posted 2003-11-17 06:13 PM

too much I could say about this.. and about how your writing touches the real.. so all I will say, is even leftover thoughts can be quite good if prepared with the kind of style and honesty you show us in your writing.

Edder
Senior Member

since 2003-04-02

Posts 671

5 posted 2003-11-17 09:21 PM

"I wonder if I am a misfit
in a world of fits"

I'm thinking it's the other way around.

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

6 posted 2003-11-17 11:03 PM

Susan, boy, have I been feeling like this lately!! Well written piece indeed. Chris

Let your life lightly dance on the edges of Time like dew on the tip of a leaf. -Tagore

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

7 posted 2003-11-18 12:23 PM

Brilliantly done!

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

8 posted 2003-11-18 04:46 AM

I sometimes don't understand my words till later on, when it really doesn't matter anyway...good write, I know what you mean

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

9 posted 2003-11-18 08:17 AM

"I wonder if I am a misfit
in a world of fits
or applying too much importance
on self
and the faults
that feel like hooves
In a field of feet"

Hmmmm...is this your subtle way of telling me that you have really big feet?????

Jason Lyle
Senior Member

since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

10 posted 2003-11-18 10:11 AM

"I wonder if I am a misfit
in a world of fits"

I love this, damn good write.

Jason

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

11 posted 2003-11-18 10:23 AM

this poem is so good I gotta read it over and over and over and over....

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

12 posted 2003-11-18 10:24 AM

Thank you everyone for responding to my random thoughts of insanity...

(Duncan...no, hooves.)

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

13 posted 2003-11-18 12:31 PM

fantastically metaphorical

Truly enjoyed the feel of this one, well-woven exposé of universal feelings, methinks

I think we all must have moments of thinking it our fault when something goes awry "out there."

Even when we know the world doesn't revolve around us, we can't help but feel it so, once in a while.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

14 posted 2003-11-18 12:32 PM

so when does you poetry class start?

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

15 posted 2003-11-18 12:33 PM

Thank you VAS...

Dan...when I figure out what I am doing..

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

C?
Member

since 2001-12-29

Posts 190

16 posted 2003-11-18 12:35 PM

maavaalous, simply maavaalous

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

17 posted 2003-11-18 12:39 PM

LOL thank you, thank you!

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

18 posted 2003-11-18 04:15 PM

I hear this... for sure.

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

19 posted 2003-11-18 04:16 PM

Thank you Meg!

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

20 posted 2003-11-18 04:47 PM

and its brilliance lives on

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

21 posted 2003-11-18 06:09 PM

a quest
she stands, proud
laced in flowing white cotton
garb of ages she
has a way about her
questioning the colors
swirling mass of sky
running about her face
the clouds try to
kiss away these doubts
but she keeps dancing
'neath the midnight moon
wishing the stars
to speak

Thanks Susan
xxoo

SimplyGold
Senior Member

since 2002-07-10

Posts 1453

22 posted 2003-11-18 06:15 PM

Deep, honest and touching. Enjoyed. Glad you write and share.

SG

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

23 posted 2003-11-18 11:14 PM

I am so glad I stopped by -- thanks for a look at a very important part of myself...and all of us here, of course. Well done.

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Darksoul
Member

since 2003-01-31

Posts 61

24 posted 2003-11-18 11:27 PM

This got to be the best poem I ever have seen it

Goldenrose
Member Elite

since 2003-05-30

Posts 3665

25 posted 2003-11-19 06:05 AM

Susan..you write so well..and you do fit in..with all of us at pip....one day you will write the best poem of your life..and pride of what you have achieved will be totaly within you...and with all of us on pip..this is a poem from your heart..and that is a precious comodity..thanks for the words....

Goldenrose.

''Each soul is potentialy divine..the goal is to manifest that divinity''

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

26 posted 2003-11-19 07:56 AM

lets read this again so we can understand the genius

EvocativeVerse2
Senior Member

since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

27 posted 2003-11-19 10:17 AM

Mmm I love this Susan. This is a darn good piece of writing. Bravo my friend.

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

28 posted 2003-11-19 12:24 PM

I think you've painted the family portrait for these blue pages. *G*

Excellent write... how well we know! *S*

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

29 posted 2003-11-24 03:23 PM

nice

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