Open Poetry #29 |
" Her eyes told my story " |
Jes Member
since 2003-10-21
Posts 422Denmark |
We were out ----- and nothing should be But out of the crowd ----- How should we go free We danced like if we were alone ----- Her touch on my skin. I felt her al through my bone ----- She and i could now begin. To become one in thoughts ----- I looked in her eyes. We were no longer two sorts ----- After this i inside cries. Her deep brown eyes ----- She was thinking. She could never tell lies ----- From today our world was shrinking. Soon we will meet ----- But cannot talk Though there is alot to exeed ----- Im still looking to were we can walk. But i know this was not only a single night, that i saw her in the light so bright with such delight. Untill time comes i will remember her brown deep eyes. Smile Jes |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
The times are ripe. Beautiful! Love, Margherita |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Jes~ Such lovely sentiments~ Thank you for sharing~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Jes Member
since 2003-10-21
Posts 422Denmark |
Thanks Margherita for reading " smile " and happy to see you enjoyed. Thank you too Marge, isnt it just one of the things about poetry that we need to share. Smile Jes [This message has been edited by Jes (11-08-2003 07:00 PM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
remembering is important |
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Jes Member
since 2003-10-21
Posts 422Denmark |
Smile sure it is Passing, but there is something over it when you can look all the way through the eyes and deep down to find the pretty litle heart that we have inside. Smile she had it, and still has. Jes |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Just lovely, Jes. Patricia |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Nice! "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Jes, For some reason or other, I couldn't help but play with the format in which this was written. First, I read the whole poem, then just left of the dash, then just right, and so on. Every way I tried it, I liked it. "She could never tell lies ----- From today our world was shrinking" I can see where it would, but I can see an opposite as well. Enjoyed. Thank you for sharing. Sadelite |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
This is so sweet. These words seem so dear to your heart. How lovely is that! Beautiful to read! Love, Terri~ |
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Jes Member
since 2003-10-21
Posts 422Denmark |
Patricia Smile thanks for ya thoughts Patricia. Susan Caldwell Thanks Susan, smile Sadelite There is an opposite but should i tell or not better not smile cause i think it would put my words in dark thoughts. If i told about everything behind smile. But i actually read it through several times after your post cause i havent seen all teh ways it could be read as i made it, but yes its true to the story or better her in each way. Thanks for ya time. smile SharaRose She was a pretty taht night and she still is i just hope i can stand what it takes. Smile and yes it means alot to mee cause in those eyes what i saw....... Smile Thanks all Hugs Jes |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Oh Jes, this is gorgeous, sweet friend, this made me smile as so many of your wonderful words do that express such deep feelings! (big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jes, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Jes Member
since 2003-10-21
Posts 422Denmark |
Thanks and smiles back Noah Hugs sendet too Smile Jes |
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