November Scenes -Tanka String

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Open Poetry #29

November Scenes -Tanka String

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

0 posted 2003-11-02 09:45 PM

November Scenes-Tanka String

November surprise-
yellow butterfly sails past,
caught in cooling gust,

temper ruffled like her wings,
flapping, beating for control.

American coot
paddling round the city pond-
silly little bird!

Bobbing funny decoy duck,
voice a clunking rusty bell.

Pudgy old poet
walking round the jogging track,
pink-faced, absent smile,

fingers counting syllables,
mazed in her own murky verse.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

1 posted 2003-11-02 09:55 PM

the poet on the jogging track, can relate as the fingers start soon to numb............
not pugdy tho,

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

2 posted 2003-11-02 09:58 PM

Loved this, could see it all very clearly..
Know all about the poet counting syllables,
trying to keep the fingers from freezing...
dah-dumm, dah-dumm...where was I?

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2003-11-03 03:31 AM

I got lost, but then I got found

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

4 posted 2003-11-03 06:09 AM

That's lovely .... I can relate to the "absent smile", not on the jogging track, but in the car when I create my senryus .... counting syllables too. (Always watchful though!).
Love, Margherita

ambrish
Member

since 2003-03-27

Posts 257
India

5 posted 2003-11-03 06:24 AM

a nice read.

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