Open Poetry #29 |
Favored Desires |
Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I want to burn myself into your body, into the soft of your least resistance. I want to touch you to trembling, and know that when the moment closes you will hold onto us awhile longer. I want to sleep without need of dream, tight against your back one night. I want you. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
hmmmmmmm...Duncan..this is a side to your writing I have not seen before...I more than love it...keep it up, you bee charmer you! "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Dunc, Wow! You burned the page with that one. Don't think it can be said much better than you have. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Damn!! just...damn. ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Duncan I think I agree with barry on this one. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Jiminy has notified Willard to change tomorrow's headline news: "Duncan gives up Krispy cream dreams for..." (to be continued) |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
OH MY GOD !!! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Duncan . . this is lovely awesome stanza: I want to burn myself into your body, into the soft of your least resistance. *smile* xxoo |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Felt like a sweet lullaby sung as a whisper, what a minstrel of your lovers soul you must be..*W*O*W* Lucky lady is she!!! A kiss for you two to share. WOW again. This is so strange because the phrase " the path of least resistance" kept going thru my mind all day today, and then I find this tonight. Kinda spooky. Love, Terri~ [This message has been edited by SharaRose (10-26-2003 08:44 PM).] |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Yes Duncan...what a lucky lady she is!! (insert Liz's copy righted smiley here) "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Thank you Myrtle...isn't that Boo charmer??? Yep, is a bit different than my usual, guess the right inspiration will do that! Barry...Well from one who's talent for writing 'burn' has impressed me on many occasions, I more than appreciate your appraisal! Thank you... Nancy...I love when ya say that!! Sy...Why thank you! Kacy, Jiminy and Willard...Giving up Krispy Kremes?!?! Even the fresh, hot, glazed ones?? Well ok, but only since she's such an irresistable cause!! Helen...Perfect response and Thank you... Thanks Sue, I'm kind of partial to that verse myself. Shara---Now that is a coincidence. Thanks for the read! Susan--- And ya won't be seeing me admit to a blush too often so ya might want to make note of the day!! I think that luck is working both ways.... [This message has been edited by Duncan (10-26-2003 11:04 PM).] |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I want to burn myself into your body, into the soft of your least resistance. Now this is HOTTTT!! and not our ususal porch puppy's style...... But, like you said, "the right inspiration" will do that to you. LOL Hugs to you and your "inspiration" Ethel |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very intense and hot! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Hmmmm...lookie what I found.... a MOTH ANTHEM!! heh well you know Im loving the pretty blue flame of this one...but also the tenderness of it as well. into the soft of your least resistance. and could that line of personifi be any cooler???? the moth thinks not... Bout time you got off that porch hmmm...its the strangest thing.... all of a sudden...I'm craving fried green tomatoes... lmao heh "I've still got sand in my shoes |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Ohhhh...JM is funny!! I think we should all go get some Fried Green Tomatoes! "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well that about says it. Short, simple, concise, honest. BAM! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
If I can read you to such trembling, I can only imagine what your touch would do! ~ As the sun and moon do rise each day and night, so may you! EA |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I had to check the name twice. For a second I thought you were the madviking poet! and yes, it's that intense... written by one who knows, I suppose? *eyes twinkling* well done, Dunc! |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Errr....I think I'll put an airco in the guesthouse....just in case ya know LOL You write beautiful in whatever style you choose Dunc! Titia |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
had to read this again and whom ever she is i hope she keeps it up !!! |
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SPUD Junior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 12 |
This is rather good. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I had to read it again, too, you old romatic porch puppy, you......And Helen? I hope whoever she is keeps it up, too!! LOL |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Hey Dunc, ol' pal This kinda thing could get a fellow in trouble, yanno? (Possibly damned good trouble) |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Well shoot and damn~ I hope you get what you want goob! I know you probably hate me, but I wish you good things, in the end when it's all said and done, that is what we all strive for. (it has nothing to do with favors...ha) Now then, could you pass me another piece of humble pie and I will go stuff myself, if it's the last thing I do. You wrote this really nice Duncan... (it's kinda therapuetic, kinda) [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (10-31-2003 12:58 AM).] |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Wow!! It's easy to see you know exactly what you want Duncan.......I loved this! Take care.......Sue I am in motion |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
back for seconds... and once again. .......Damn!! ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Temptress
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Breathtaking love and need you show in this, Duncan. I miss this place, and you are one of my favorites of course. Just to let you know, I'm sending this via passions e-card to m'love. He doesn't get here much anymore, so maybe this will bring him back. Lovely..thank you for the smile and the soft sights I got from this. My favorite part...or one of them "I want to touch you to trembling," I LOVE YOU! I LOVE YOU! I LOVE YOU! [This message has been edited by Temptress (10-30-2003 11:34 PM).] |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Hi... What a lovely expression of love, longing and desire.... Lauren~ Will the wind ever remember the names |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
It's always nice to read a poem where the feeling jumps off the screen at you. This one sure did that! I definitely enjoyed this. |
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