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Detours from the Sea |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~ I gave no thought to what lie ahead nor did I create illusions of my own making that being, in part my reasons for believing. There were no signs of false hope or endless love to look forward to yet in the confines of those limitations I found a comfort zone honest to a fault, beneath the quaking. Caught up by the force of human nature shatters the surrounding mystery drawn into the pull while trying to hold my own leaves me shaken. How strange the things we set apart separates the heart seams splitting down the middle shifting castles in the sand. Shades of blue, pales in reality surrounded by indifference buried under double meanings dripping down with tears. Scattered memories and broken pieces are all that I hold near a road blocks and detours from the sea picking up where I left off. May you find that common ground and a way to get around it without losing sight of where you've been or know the feelings that you cost me. Come hither, and shiver my timbers let me, let you go. ~*~ [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (10-18-2003 03:08 AM).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"May you find that common ground and a way to get around it without losing sight of where you've been or know the feelings that you cost me." I think you are a better person than I am. |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Yes, head high, face forward...and do I see the fists clenched? Good, maybe that too, just in case. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Always nice to see you here, thank you James. icebox~  I don't think so~ Thanks, you. That's right, just in case! You make me laugh James_A~ I thank ya very much!!! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori...Much strength and character reflective of you in this poem.  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I see your words will never fail you... a good thing for us hugs M |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Martie~ Thank you so much for reading. Yep the negative forces were working against me, and it was more trouble than it's worth. Hugs~ Maureen~ What a nice thing to say, spoken like a true friend. Love you lady~ and thank you. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
sorta sums it right up....great write... Come hither, and shiver my timbers let me, let you go. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
let me, let you go. ~*~ And did he? Well done, bluesy... |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Hi there Barry~ Yea, I guess it sorta does. Gee thanks, I really do appreciate it. Oh well hell, it was all my fault in the first place. (or so I've been told) Time to stop beating myself up and let it go once and for all! Thank you for your sweet reply Karilea~ |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
aaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhh exhale........... he's gone.................. its gonna be better days ahead |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Oh girlie, thank you for seeing me through. Ahhhhh yes, it feels good to breathe again. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Lori- damn girl, when you write you WRITE! This was beyond excellence! I felt every word of this. Each stanza could have stood by itself and still the meaning wouldn't have been lost. I am sorry for your pain, but it sure does leave you inspired at the same time, and that makes us all that read you very lucky indeed! take care hon. Amy "love is like a butterfly-- |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Sweet Amy~ I take it all back, I think I'm the lucky one. No pain no gain, and I'm a better person for it. (just took me awhile to see things for what they are) Hugs and thank you for your warm reply. [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (10-18-2003 09:19 PM).] |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Shades of blue, pales in reality surrounded by indifference buried under double meanings dripping down with tears. I believe, and I mean this when I write, when life delivers those most difficult times, perhaps in a way, we don't see the gifts in all it's meaning. If we never felt this kind of pain, how would be know loss and be able to really want to change? Make things different..do some self examinations and go from there???? Beautifully written and marvelously felt. This was truly astounding. Thank you for sharing. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
A beautiful, poignant write... with the perfect ending... Your strength and talent are both shining. *S* |
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