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Can You
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
Can you see the tears falling down my cheeks? Can you hear my words even though I don't speak? Is it hard to see me for who I am? Is it so hard for you to understand? I'm not the prettiest woman in the world. Sometimes I still act like a little girl. Can you see not see how I love you so? Can you not feel my pain when I see you go? Is it too much to ask for you to see me? And all of the possibilities that I can be. I don't ask for much, just a little of you. Just be there to hold me when I'm feeling blue. For even though you can't see me for the woman I am. I will shine bright as a star, the best that I can. angelblueyes |
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Tequilia_Sunrise Senior Member
since 2003-02-19
Posts 612Lochalsh, Ontario, Canada |
very touching............. it's not nice to have thoses feelings that you are going unniticed or that ppl dont understand you specialy thoses that love you. but it's even harder to tell them that you feel that way...... very beautifull! Ms. Amanda |
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Thomas119gold Senior Member
since 2002-06-03
Posts 708Biloxi, MS (city by the sea) |
This calls out with so much emotion beautiful piece Rogue |
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minoune Member
since 2003-08-10
Posts 87Canada |
i don't know about whoever you were writing about in your poem, but as far as i'm concerned angel... you're a shining star already... good write.. minoune |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
If they don't see you for who you are then they just aren't worth it...trade them in for a better model.. This piece ached..well done. Susan |
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S Arthur Grey Senior Member
since 2001-03-19
Posts 719woven by a poet's loom |
"Can you?" leaves the question open as to the clarity of the message the speaker is delivering to this audience of one. And if the answer is "no", then perhaps it is the message that needs work. "Will you?" would suggest that a clearer message has been offered and a clear choice is given to that audience. Just something to think about . . . s.a.g. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
From this soul to yours, Dear Angel With The Blue Eyes, you are beautiful beyond words. Your poetry is an expression of who you truly are, and that makes you very beautiful indeed.  EA |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
It is the beauty from within that is enduring...a soft heart, a tender kiss...James |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
Amanda:Thank you very much  Thomas:Thank you minoune:Thank you.Your comment means alot Susan:Thanks, better hmm...heheheheh S Arthur Grey:Thank you.I'm always open to suggestions angelblueyes |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
EA:Thank you so much my friend  I do sahre my heart and soul with those that are my friends and family.That's just me James:Thanks.Both of these qaulities you have my friend  angelblueyes |
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