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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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inside me is a cobble-stone road and the stones are bearing their weight on my heart heaving heavily desperation deposits itself silt-like uninvited like regret I reach out in the dark groping for a rope that will pull me out of this hole something tells me no rope will do I need a ladder and a firm ground to lay it on and an honest wall to support it quick I need it quick for the weight of the stones is pulling me under down into the sinking bottom of this black lake on the surface of which the moon smiles wickedly no evil is not the moon it is just one of those things like quicksand soft and inviting the more you push it the more you are dragged in it soft like love like a puppy I tugged the leash only to learn the more you pull the more you hurt your neck the power of love is a leash freedom is in the unleashing but who knows that poison kills unless tasted yet not all that is sour is poison |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
Wow... I love your free verse, Sudhir. This is great! “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy your words  |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Many thought-provoking images here seasoned with truth and relatability. -MVS You CAN make a difference: |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
a good, level spill, this... a quiet rant... Well done... |
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Christina24rb Junior Member
since 2003-07-25
Posts 13Georgia |
"reach out in the dark groping for a rope that will pull me out of this hole" |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
many lines here i liked... "desperation deposits itself silt-like uninvited like regret" "just one of those things like quicksand soft and inviting the more you push it the more you are dragged in it soft like love" "but who knows that poison kills unless tasted yet not all that is sour is poison" "I need a ladder and a firm ground to lay it on and an honest wall to support it" nice, nice very nice...h |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
ahhhh some poison is indeed sweet very sweet Sudhir . . . *tossing stones aside* *smile* you always leave me in awe . . . xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (08-08-2003 11:54 AM).] |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sudhir Stirring and edgy...filled with anxiety, yet with the unreal quality of a dream. Well done! |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
Your words speak volumes, the imagery is great, and I love the form. angelblueyes |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
Sudhir, you are music painfully beautiful at times beautifully painful, others keep writing man you've got the vision |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
spill? hmmmmm but everything is poison . . . its just a matter of dosage. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Awfully nice! Yes...very well done Nice to read you again. Ed |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you all, my dear friends, so very much... Regards, Sudhir |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
OK..so where are you these days and why aren't you in here writing??? Huh???? |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Hello my smiling friend ! Your words always make me wish I could meet you in person and discuss things...life...and all it's ups and downs. Awesome. hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice read |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
fantastic writing sudhir |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, this sounds stone cold, yet when the surface is solid as a rock, it is easy to run onward and at the end of the road you are bound to find smooth ground to welter on! (sigh) This is so eloquently said, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sudhir, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
So that's what you've been doing? Moving from India to Belgium?!? May you grow and prosper in your new home! I hope this poem is not representative to how you are feeling at the present time, but if it is, you spilled your emotions down the page, very poetically!  EA |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Sudhir - you're words are amazing this night. Excellent writing my friend... BC |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
You are all so kind and supporting... Thanks so much for all that and more... Regards Sudhir |
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