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On Seashells and Sandals
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On Seashells and Sandals |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Too long ago You waded in the edges Not retreating fast enough to avoid The spill of water Into sanded shoes And laughed A wrinkled purse of face laugh Chagrined It happened yet again Night fell behind us Leaving no color for our sea But a growing gloaming And perhaps a yearning To agree Brush your lips There is a crust of salt forming That if I were to bend And place mine on yours I would taste the sea You’d not have me taste the depths Here on shallow shores And I’d not swim well If you let go Letting me sink Slowly to drown In the color of you Tides coming in… And footprints are erased Once… Not once again |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
WOW!!!!This is very good. Crystal |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
Slowly to drown In the color of you Tides coming in… And footprints are erased Once… Not once again *nod* I hate this feeling. You always amaze me, and I'm glad I read this.  Kielo I'll never forget you.... I know that much, despite my foolishness. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Crystal.. thank you ma'am.. glad you found it enjoyable. Keilo... (chuckling) no need to be mazed..but I'm glad you read it too. thank you both. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron There is a magic in the ocean, that holds memories even after the footprints have been erased. The meloncholy in this touched me. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"You waded in the edges Not retreating fast enough to avoid The spill of water Into sanded shoes" Hey...I have done this...now where was I? Ron...this one is very special...reminds me of a day... Susan |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah, the tides have turned and it is the reader who is swept away... |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
Echoing Sunshine's thoughts! This was wonderful! )))hugs((( Tima |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
You’d not have me taste the depths Here on shallow shores And I’d not swim well If you let go Letting me sink Slowly to drown In the color of you Capt Ron, you are sooooo good!!!  Hugs  Ethel |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
I tried to find a favourite line or two....but I love it all !! This beauty is going into my library. Wonderful. Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
This painting of the sea spoke twilight...of a love and of a time. Left me thinking of the briney depths that sometimes seem to swallow us. Well done. TD |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
You know I love you don't you? Even though I seem to manage to miss your writes, know that when i eventually find them, i am absorbed in your intricate details, and pure emotion. into my library.  Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
licking my salty lips, enjoying this read |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I am envious, and NO, I am not licking my salted lips...I will leave that to the ladies.... Excellent write.. |
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jade dragoness Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 76 |
I must admit, I love a salty taste upon my lips. And I never get tired of feeling sand between my toes, nor the scent of salt air in my nose. And especially, I shall never tire of reading fine poetry. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"On Seashells and Sandals" -- a fabulous title for an equally fabulous piece of p-o-e-t-r-y!  You painted this with a graceful poetic brush... EA |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Another to add to my personal collection... A pleasure, always... ~Tier |
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MsSouthernOrchid Member
since 2003-07-12
Posts 192 |
This poem is perfect. You should take a bow. Bravo!( standing and applauding ). I really love it. From one who grew up on the beaches in Florida as I did, I can picture this scene so clearly in my mind, and you painted it so well! It put a smile on my face. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Hey, you left me no choice... "if you won't let me fall for you |
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