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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Spirit Cloud What is rain mother asked the sparrow’s child long after the time of the last flood I will show you said earth gather me a spirit cloud within my water jar be careful not to spill for the well is dry let it fill from the meaning of drink until it is puffed and important let it fly from your hand like balloons in every color to amuse the sky then as it rest over the tops of trees long gone it will pierce your neglect with an arrow of fire when the dry lake and river run gold its burst will be felt and you will know the meaning of rain ------- 8-9-02 |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Jesus Marti . . . this one gave me goosebumps maybe it is me but my God . . . this feeling of impending rain and the way you presented it is quite amazing xxoo |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
A sense of teaching, but also a sense of seeking, seeking something that might never be found, or that might be just -- there, waiting for you to see. A heartfelt walk on tiptoe, along the edge of the edge of the other side....beautiful. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Martie, this is so beautiful. I love the way you do this.  Hugs  Ethel |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I remember... and it is as poignant a read now as it was then... ah girl, your gifts... are so bountiful. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ Such a spiritual *gifting* you have~ This found me ... drenching me in remember of a beautiful spirit who now dances in my rain~ Me WUB U ! *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Ahhhh... I'd missed this gem. *S* And it is that. *S* |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
let it fly from your hand like balloons in every color to amuse the sky Martie sweet lady, this is so beautiful. Going into my library it is. hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Martie, I am serious, you would make a lot of money if you wrote young children's picture books like this. I used to have many hundreds, and I'm a fussy buyer. When we moved, I gave hundreds away. Now I have about a hundred favorites left, each one beloved by my children, and now waiting for grandchildren to read to. I'd buy yours in a second. There is magic in your words, my friend. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Yes Marti, much talent and tenderness in your words. Perfect for us kids of all ages. TD |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
when the dry lake and river run gold its burst will be felt Your poetry is so full of meaning Martie, and I am so grateful to have the opportunity to read the beauty that spills from your words. Truly~ |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Yes, yes, Martie, you have captured the importance of rain in this poem. Being a landscaper in the east, I have had battle with it this spring and all summer, yet I never curse it....have been through to many long bouts without it..Love the language in this poem, that rings of first nation influence, and how it moves my emotions..great job...ice * * * * * exceptional lines> "let it fill from the meaning of drink until it is puffed and important" |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
wisdom pours |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Woah.. when it rains it pours, you've just made my night. Library. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
uh.... wow |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - what a powerful poem - wow images and feelings that just are hard to express other than WOW - loved this - Paul |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
Martie, you speak of things such as the rain here in ways that I could never imagine.You are a angelic soul. angelblueyes |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This is very cool!!!!!!!!!!! ...ahem...OK, I will be more serious. This is a nice presentation of the building and urgency of rain. *smile* |
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