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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2003-09-18 07:02 AM

Midnite's mask unveils as flowers fill the dawn,
running wild down hills from nets as frost comes on,
blaring dots, yellow as september's schoolsbuses
neon lights on summer's worn out mats,
to herald in the fall.

Surprise to eyes, when thought all growth now locked in hibernation's stall,
as stars now simmer long into the still dark dawn,
and leaves freefall, trail silverbirds gone southward bound,
deluded that they too are winged right now.

As confirmations come on little truths ive sown in 40 plus,
the cycles seem to drag me through and spin me round,
as fall and summer intertwine
faced oppostite on mirrored sides,
and share eachothers costumes for this time,
before the breath of frost will come and silence all,
and haunts of halloween will stain the autmunn sky.

In reading braille along a holy shrine,
tips of fingers grasp for some thing that may stick a while,
but sadly gather only wisps of air,
though this Ive grown to know -

Stay planted on the ground and witness what is now,
but seek above, while fixed as stars upon their moment's glow,
before life's quicksand locks you in to claim your soul.

Opeth
Senior Member

since 2001-12-13

Posts 1543
The Ravines

1 posted 2003-09-18 07:46 AM

And everything about life's sand is so slow when young, but so quick as we age.

I enjoyed reading this, great imagery.

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2003-09-18 08:06 AM

inkedgoddess
Sad but well done, enjoyed.

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

3 posted 2003-09-18 08:48 AM

Lady, what an artist you are, this was stunningly beautiful!!!!

Surprise to eyes, when thought all growth now locked in hibernation's stall,
as stars now simmer long into the still dark dawn,
and leaves freefall, trail silverbirds gone southward bound,
deluded that they too are winged right now.

There are no words that I can use which would do justice to this poem....

ASTOUNDING and thank you for writing and sharing.
Hugs Lee J.

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

4 posted 2003-09-18 09:58 AM

enjoyed

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

5 posted 2003-09-18 10:13 AM

oh gee the ink from the goddest of poetry has spilled many words of wisdom upon us and
again created a masterpiece,

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

6 posted 2003-09-18 11:02 AM

inkedgoddess - you write with much depth of feelings, as your pen leaves the words on pages of blue. Excellent...

BC

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

7 posted 2003-09-18 01:17 PM

This was wonderful inked one...
Some brilliant lines here...describing two seasons facing each other in mirrored opposites. I quite liked that metaphor...
You aren't really gone, are ya?
TD

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

8 posted 2003-09-18 01:24 PM

I'm keeping this one. Hope you knew that already, dear poet. Autumn does fade into winter, but you keep yourself grounded in spring thoughts.

Even in its sadness, this is such a wonderfully well written uplifting piece.

[This message has been edited by Midnitesun (09-18-2003 01:26 PM).]

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

9 posted 2003-09-18 05:28 PM

I'd have to say htis is one of your best... absolutely marvellous.

keeping it if you don't mind

Maree

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

10 posted 2003-09-18 05:33 PM

The world is a fascinating place when seen through your poetic eyes.

EA

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

11 posted 2003-09-18 05:38 PM

Michele...this is a wonderful write,
and I have to agree...one of your best.

Hugs,
~Vicky
When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

bklynboy
Senior Member

since 2002-12-15

Posts 660
florida

12 posted 2003-09-18 06:37 PM

Powerful feeling shining thru....enjoyed as usual...God I hate being redundant!

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

13 posted 2003-09-18 06:52 PM

Fantastic write...love your style!
Enjoyed this so much!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~ I love your glances meeting mine
across forever or the room ~

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