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bsquirrel

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since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

0 posted 2003-09-16 02:07 PM

Tonight, love,
hide all distractions.
Snuff out all your cigarettes.
Clear the room of any music.
I'll help you put away the dishes,
dry the table, sweep the floor,
take the garbage to the curb.

That done, follow me outside.
Lock the door and, by my side,
hand in hand walk softly by
the frozen glass-edge of the Bow.
Carburn, cold, white-bright with snow.
The huddled, sleeping gazebo.
Our path will saunter to the woods.

Tonight, love,
follow deep.
The stars and moon
will grow with light
and clarify the black-blue sky
as though the empty, quiet night
were infinite and bright,
magnified on a slide.

Without distraction, I will speak
my love to you, here with you,
when two mouths warm in every breath,
I feel immortal, without fear.

This is why I asked you here
without sounds or sights or tastes
or touches beyond those we make.
Our words alone this moment takes.

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2003-09-16 02:14 PM

Smiling at this invitation/request. She responded favorably, I hope.

bsquirrel

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since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

2 posted 2003-09-16 02:15 PM

I won't know until I get to try it in February. Grrr to long distance.

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

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Gaia

3 posted 2003-09-16 02:19 PM

LOL, that's way too far in the future!
GRRR is right. Good luck, anyway.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2003-09-16 02:23 PM

Tonight, love,
follow deep.
The stars and moon
will grow with light
and clarify the black-blue sky
as though the empty, quiet night
were infinite and bright,
magnified on a slide.

Without distraction, I will speak
my love to you, here with you,
when two mouths warm in every breath,
I feel immortal, without fear.

This is why I asked you here
without sounds or sights or tastes
or touches beyond those we make.
Our words alone this moment takes.
==============================

oh my oh my...
those verses above stand on their own,
such poetically exquisite phrasing and expression...classically beautiful expressions.
and that last verse...that last line...
poetry in its purest form.

"If you see lonely, clear skies turning stormy ...
Lightning strikes and all you see is blue ... this is me missing you"

JH

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2003-09-16 03:00 PM

"Without distraction, I will speak
my love to you, here with you,
when two mouths warm in every breath,
I feel immortal, without fear.

This is why I asked you here
without sounds or sights or tastes
or touches beyond those we make.
Our words alone this moment takes."

Fantastic write here Mikie!
Gawd this is SO good!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~ I love your glances meeting mine
across forever or the room ~

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

6 posted 2003-09-16 03:01 PM

beauty eh

bsquirrel

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since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

7 posted 2003-09-16 04:34 PM

Thank you. Writing love poetry is usually my cure for depression.

Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

8 posted 2003-09-16 07:43 PM

god Mikey this is beautiful!!! glad I came in to peek..*sigh* I'm gonna go cry now..I'm feeling depressed I need another smoke..

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

9 posted 2003-09-16 09:40 PM

Good lord, squirrel dude!

That's all my friend...just "Good lord!"

(And am happy to see that love comes in x-tra tall, cause you look good in it!)
Ed

mytuesdaywishes
Member

since 2003-09-05

Posts 254
a voice from the musicbox

10 posted 2003-09-16 09:45 PM

wow, you hopeless romantic you...what a beautiful way of putting it, love, hide all distractions, i really love how you incorporated the toils of everyday life into it. love really does take us away from all that.

and even when everything was wrong, and we were mad at the world, it was still beautiful.

brian sites
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since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

11 posted 2003-09-16 10:47 PM

drifting like winterbreath
through the lowbranches

a great great poem

angelblueyes
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since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

12 posted 2003-09-16 10:50 PM

I know she said yes.

Crystal

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

13 posted 2003-09-16 11:07 PM

Tonight, love,
follow deep.
The stars and moon
will grow with light
and clarify the black-blue sky
as though the empty, quiet night
were infinite and bright,
magnified on a slide.

My goodness, Mike, I knew that you could write, but I didn't know that you could write love poetry this way. This hopeless romantic loves it!! I hope that you don't have to get depressed to do it, but I sure do hope that you write some more of these love poens. Absolutely beautiful, this is!!

Hugs

Ethel

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

14 posted 2003-09-18 05:27 AM

Nice...James

1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

15 posted 2003-09-18 05:30 AM

b...did i ever tell you how much i LOVEEEEEEEE how you write? i think i did.... but i will tell you again and again !!!! h

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

16 posted 2003-09-18 10:54 AM

enjoyed

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

17 posted 2003-09-18 11:05 AM

bsquirrel - your words will say your thoughts and intertwine with hers. Nice write...

BC

bsquirrel

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since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

18 posted 2003-09-18 12:02 PM

Much thanks.

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light

19 posted 2003-09-18 07:15 PM

You're my kind of Squirrel!

Linda

Kaoru

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since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

20 posted 2003-09-18 11:40 PM

"Killing me softly..."

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

21 posted 2003-09-19 12:03 PM

Tonight, love,
follow deep.
The stars and moon
will grow with light
and clarify the black-blue sky
as though the empty, quiet night
were infinite and bright,
magnified on a slide.

Without distraction, I will speak
my love to you, here with you,
when two mouths warm in every breath,
I feel immortal, without fear.

This is why I asked you here
without sounds or sights or tastes
or touches beyond those we make.
Our words alone this moment takes.

Oh my my... swooning here.

keeping it too

Maree

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

22 posted 2003-09-19 12:08 PM

Oh my, Mikey...got me swooning here too.
This is beautiful, my friend.
Hugs,
~Vicky
When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

23 posted 2003-09-19 12:56 PM

Thanks all. I like this pome.

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

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New York

24 posted 2003-09-20 02:19 AM

Mikey,

Without distraction, I will speak
my love to you, here with you,
when two mouths warm in every breath,
I feel immortal, without fear.

without fear . . .
stunning Mikey
xxoo

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