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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2003-09-16 11:40 AM

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       Requisite turnings leave fall
To float on puddles with red and gold
                     Burnished hymns of light
       Sung on rippled chords of change
                          So be it so
                                              Again

“I’ll never be the same, after I close my eyes.”

The ripple of waves still sounds rhythms on stone
Leaving the ears alone to know
Heartbeats can be more than one
When engaging revolutions spin the wind
And bring thoughts of you
To another verge of season

Soon,
Hoar frost will take the remaining green
And twist it in a cold vise leaving
Burned brown stem alone
To sway

The hearth will hold coals
And my heart will hold
To summer
         To warm
                  To you

For now,
       I’ll place my thoughts,
Delicate words written on leaf,
Un-guilded cold
                      Of believing in Grace

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

1 posted 2003-09-16 11:42 AM

Cpat,
Well done, enjoyed the read.

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2003-09-16 11:46 AM

Each and every stanza
could stand alone as a poem
in their own write...

But you created a necklace
and it drapes the neck
of a reader
with grace, and charm.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2003-09-16 12:31 PM

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       Requisite turnings leave fall
To float on puddles with red and gold
                     Burnished hymns of light
       Sung on rippled chords of change
                          So be it so
                                              Again

“I’ll never be the same, after I close my eyes.”

The ripple of waves still sounds rhythms on stone
Leaving the ears alone to know
Heartbeats can be more than one
When engaging revolutions spin the wind
And bring thoughts of you
To another verge of season
=============================

good gawd..............................

I'll be back when I can utter more than moth stutterings...............

"If you hear teardrops falling like rain on the rooftops ...
know what you're listening to ... is me missing you."

JH

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2003-09-16 01:23 PM

I'm with JM...
You, this, leave me speechless.
Amazing Ron....
~Hugs~

~ I love your glances meeting mine
across forever or the room ~

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

5 posted 2003-09-16 01:25 PM

Very nice...

I know not of winters ice..

Susan

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

6 posted 2003-09-16 01:27 PM

"For now,
I’ll place my thoughts,
Delicate words written on leaf,"

Ah, the stuff of Autumn magic!

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

7 posted 2003-09-16 01:33 PM

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       Requisite turnings leave fall
To float on puddles with red and gold
                     Burnished hymns of light
       Sung on rippled chords of change
                          So be it so
                                              Again
==================

that verse is just so very impressive...
its imagery is stunning..its vocab, personifications and analogies are brilliant and its subtle mix of longing and anticipation create the poems intend and pull the reader in with poetic perfection.

Requisite turnings leave fall
To float on puddles with red and gold
                     Burnished hymns of light
       Sung on rippled chords of change

that is beyond exquisite...like I said above the whole analogy is poetic brillance.


“I’ll never be the same, after I close my eyes.”
================

I feel the same way often after reading your poetry.

Fall is making for an amazing muse for you poet sir.

"If you see lonely, clear skies turning stormy ...
Lightning strikes and all you see is blue ... this is me missing you"

JH

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

8 posted 2003-09-16 03:50 PM

tis all the beauty of the world......I love to see those leaves falling....moving...

Lauren~

The way you move me
I walk with your shadow
With your silhouette
Leave the light on
It always comes
Back to you

gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

9 posted 2003-09-16 06:31 PM

Soon,
Hoar frost will take the remaining green
And twist it in a cold vise leaving
Burned brown stem alone
To sway

When I grow up, I want to be like you.
but female of course. I can only imagine the way you see things, and i love reading the way you do.

MARK V SHELDON
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 3015
In a corporeal internship...

10 posted 2003-09-16 11:18 PM

Above all, I think I like the undercurrent of subjective allusion and intent inherent throughout this write -- there's much deeper meaning behind this poem than the reader will ever know...

-MVS

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angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

11 posted 2003-09-16 11:44 PM

This brings forth so much and leaves me breathless.

Crystal

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

12 posted 2003-09-17 12:49 PM

Burnished hymns of light
Sung on rippled chords of change

and this shall be my last read of the eve...

So be it so

"I'll never be the same, after I close my eyes."

say goodnight moth....

goodnight poets

"If you see lonely, clear skies turning stormy ...
Lightning strikes and all you see is blue ... this is me missing you"

JH

[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (09-17-2003 12:50 AM).]

MorninGlory
Member

since 2003-08-30

Posts 175
Oklahoma

13 posted 2003-09-17 12:52 PM

Well done, beautiful descriptions, almost popped out of the page, this is delightful!

~ becky

heartpiper
Member

since 2003-09-02

Posts 57

14 posted 2003-09-17 01:14 AM

slowly creeps in the soul
Regards
Iyad

"Hallow the body as a temple to comeliness and sanctify the heart as a sacrifice to love; love recompenses the adorers."
Khalil Gibran

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