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Aenimal
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the ass-end of space

0 posted 2003-09-15 04:25 PM


     


your reign will end
in stone crack and vine
in brown and green

flaura and fauna
reclaim the stolen
gaia speaks in whispers
but screams in the heart of
i hear it content


photography © Copyright 2003 RG

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (09-16-2003 03:38 AM).]

© Copyright 2003 raphael giuffrida - All Rights Reserved
gemjop
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1 posted 2003-09-15 04:32 PM


You know this one is my favourite. urban jungle.
you're nearly as talented as kelly
you mr are worth too much to measure.
i have said you 3 times, somebody feeed meeee!

Instant karma's gonna get you.

Kaoru
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2 posted 2003-09-15 04:36 PM


*drools*
garysgirl
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3 posted 2003-09-15 04:43 PM


Raph, they say that a picture speaks a thousand words.....
well, your picture along with your words speaks volumes, Sir.
I love this and am going to keep it, if that's okay?
  -n-  
Ethel

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4 posted 2003-09-15 04:45 PM


Oh my...amazing!


~ I love your glances meeting mine
     across forever or the room ~

1slick_lady
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5 posted 2003-09-15 04:46 PM


you are the best photographer I know
(except for my mother of course)
and you also paint with words
talent sheer talent

Cpat Hair
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6 posted 2003-09-15 04:47 PM


nice image... and I enjoyed the wording here..but truthfully found the repeating lines at the end not to be needed and taking away from the overall impact...
perhaps a play on reign... rain... or something to rhyme... you'll deign and end...

LOL... once in a while..I read something and it strikes me..as such a good beginning or the presentation something that inspires me..and I find myself more critical than usual... this one hit me that way... made me want to write it... LOL... not that I would do it better...but just feel the need to translate it into my own words somehow..so I make suggestions...


Aenimal
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7 posted 2003-09-15 08:27 PM


yer a doll Gem but you have to stop licking chairs

here's a napkin megs..we gotta do somethin bout that problem

thanks for the compliment Ethel

Thank you Nancy

H you're mother painted with deeds thus creating the masterpiece that is you..

Ron agree with you completely, it felt redundant but i was in a mood and loved the sound of the line, always feel free to make suggestions with me


inkedgoddess
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8 posted 2003-09-15 10:19 PM


amazing what a little schrubery will do to
infuse some life into the most mundane of surroundings.......

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9 posted 2003-09-15 10:22 PM


This is awesome. The photo & your words. hugs, Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers
That perches in the soul ~
            Emily Dickinson




    

Ceinwyn
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10 posted 2003-09-15 10:34 PM


HEY! looks like the back of my old apartment in the city...preeetyyy pictures...makes krissy happy urhh yeah...this was kewl..

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

littlewing
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11 posted 2003-09-16 01:43 PM


Raph, ohh you know I adore this photo from a long time ago . . .
and end?

somehow (strangely) I see beauty in this
amazing writing, your back!!!!
xxoo

MARK V SHELDON
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12 posted 2003-09-17 12:04 PM


b/w is still the best, and you caught this one dead in its tracks.  DRAMATIC!

-MVS

You CAN make a difference:
http://educate-yourself.org/

angelblueyes
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13 posted 2003-09-17 12:09 PM


You bring such life to things wiht your photography and your words.Amazing.
Crystal

Aenimal
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14 posted 2003-09-17 12:14 PM


Thanks kris

Sue there is beauty to an end

Mark exactly why i never work with anything but B/W film when i do take pictures

Crystal thank you for the compliment

vlraynes
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15 posted 2003-09-17 12:15 PM



Raph...I love this...both the photo
and the accompanying verse.

VERY nicely done, sir poet.

Hugs,
~Vicky

When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

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16 posted 2003-09-17 10:52 AM


completely incredible...and I love the black&white photo as well!  Black and white are SO fun to take...

"Vision without action is a daydream.  Action without vision is a nightmare." -Japanese Proverb
~ KS

EvocativeVerse2
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17 posted 2003-09-17 11:14 AM


Love the photo! Great words! It was worth the read. Wonderfully done...looking forward to seeing more.
littlewing
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New York
18 posted 2003-09-17 01:07 PM


there is indeed
(that is not what I meant
and no, still not getting your wish)

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