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On The Outside Looking In
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On The Outside Looking In |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
On The Outside Looking In Copyright 2003 by: Mark V Sheldon Across the lawn behind the fence where minds had gone to recompense A knotted tree scraped on the pane a melody for the insane The home was dark the wind blew cold the pathway stark and cracked and old The metal bars could not contain the hurt and scars of fear and pain The voices heard as distant cries without a word you realize As memories come flooding in you’re ill at ease for where you’ve been… You CAN make a difference: |
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mytuesdaywishes Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 254a voice from the musicbox |
amazing...there's such weight in your words. your invoke the deepest memories and there is no cure for nostalgia, you're right. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Mark...I love this! Love the wording... the flow...all of it. Wonderfully done, sir.  Hugs, ~Vicky When the power of love overcomes the |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) And then isn't that why we have memories...to experience the nostalgua and remind ourselves piece-by-piece who we are, on this mission of exploring and collecting and finding relationships and connections between the parts? (big hugggsssssss) This is so well-said, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Mark, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
very beautiful Mr. Sheldon. I really liked this one. :-) |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
Sometimes it's hard to pick which is better .. outside looking in or inside looking out Can always count on you for a questionable answer! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
damn...this aches |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
As memories come flooding in you’re ill at ease for where you’ve been… or ill at ease for where you would be.. either way it works.... nice piece Mark.. the open way it frames a question or perspective lets the reader indeed choose for themselves what it all means to them.. enjoyed |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
mytuesdaywishes: Thank you, kindly. A "cure for notalgia"... That's probably the only thing that should remain incureable; as for bad memories... I suppose they serve a purpose as well... Vicky, I'm pleased it resonated with you -- I guess I'm getting into the Halloween spirit a little early this year...  Noah: Agreed. As the famous quote states: "No matter where you go -- there you are." Thanks, Froggy. Craig: Such is the beauty and mystery of words and subjectivity. As long as one looks, one shall find, but it could be more than one bargained for... Dixie, I suppose it could... Thank you, Ron. The choice will always remain the reader's... -MVS You CAN make a difference: |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
You make me realise every bad memory, is just as important as the good. another great write Mark. Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
That was an interesting view from "On The Outside Looking In"---and you accomplished this by using more words than usual! lol   EA [This message has been edited by Earth Angel (09-16-2003 11:16 PM).] |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
WOW!!This ached but with a sense of meaning that everything has a reason and a place. Maybe that's why their memories to remember from time to time instead of keeping them fresh.This brought alot back, but also gave me alot to reflect upon.Thanks for shedding some light on some things. Crystal |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Gemma: A great part is in the realization. Thanks for stopping by. EA, sometimes limitations can be stifling while other times, inspiring... I guess it's all situational and based on perspective. Crystal: Always honored to stimulate, prod, and provoke. -MVS You CAN make a difference: |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
Mark, its the ones we don't look for that hurt the most ... ... nothing like feeling BLINDSIDED! (always keep the reader involved) |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mark A deep and meaningful expression using imagery to capture the emotion. Well done! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
The metal bars could not contain the hurt and scars of fear and pain The voices heard as distant cries without a word you realize this just sums it all up for me, what an insightful write this morning Mark. thank you for sharing this gem. |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
very dark...very good :-) "Vision without action is a daydream. Action without vision is a nightmare." -Japanese Proverb |
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