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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio 
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prefabricated clouds stack the sky, thick as curdled milk, they frame the muted trees that line the row houses, pieces placed strategically on a game board, no thing moves, life's a stalemate, the pallete dipped upon by overused brushes, poetry no longer paints here, even the blackbirds freed of the magician's hat can't slice the fugue state, getting lost in the pockets the loom of clouds are weaving [This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (09-15-2003 09:56 PM).] |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
this is a breathless write. really really great. And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!" |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
even the blackbirds freed of the magician's hat can't slice the fugue state, getting lost in the pockets the loom of clouds are weaving Extremely well written piece !! hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) This is a wonderfully, haunting expression, dearest friend, your poetry always has unique and scintillating imgery to it, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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mytuesdaywishes Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 254a voice from the musicbox |
wow, such powerful imagery, absolutely suggests mastery of your surroundings and how you respond to them. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
"the pallete dipped upon by overused brushes, poetry no longer paints here, even the blackbirds freed of the magician's hat can't slice the fugue state," Such cool lines in this. Love it, Michele.  Hugs, ~Vicky When the power of love overcomes the |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
amazing write.. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
At first sight I thought you'd drawn a pun from Ahemingway..... ....but it wasn't so, just the perfect title for a wordsong of subtle tones and shadings, that shows a feeling I've known all too often. One line isn't true, though -- "poetry no longer paints here," ....maybe not there, but most certainly here, because while this is not written in your most usual style, it's one of your best. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
lingering and solace, those feelings which give us a chance to ponder and feel good. That's what this write did for me. Thanks, enjoyed. mysticpoe If nothing is something then everything is our thoughts and feelings and all that exists. [This message has been edited by mysticpoe (09-16-2003 09:55 AM).] |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
ahh melancholy bittersweet Michele always an art in itself reading you xxoo |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Well we can tell your head was in the clouds!  Just kidding around. This made me think of those days you lay in the grass, and look to the sky to see if you can see a form of something in the clouds. Very nice to read.  SharaRose @-->-- Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"getting lost in the pockets the loom of clouds are weaving" A very moving reminder.. Susan |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
This is one of, if not, the best poem of yours, that I have had the pleasure to read. Enjoyed! "If this grand panorama before me is what you call God...then God is not dead." [This message has been edited by Opeth (09-16-2003 02:08 PM).] |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thanks wind for the breathlessness chris, glad u liked noah, thanks for stopping by tueday, welcome here vicky, thanks for pointing out the lines Q, thanks for the lift off meghan, wow to you too Ed, glad you enjoyed...yes, A Moveable Feast,not the book though the CD by Fairport Convention.....listening to CD at the time mystic, glad i could be Dr. Feelgood Sue, yes art it is some days, thanks shara, yes something like that lost in the clouds thanks susan, glad i could move u opeth....thats a nice compliment, thank you [This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (09-16-2003 07:01 PM).] |
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bklynboy Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660florida |
What can I say.....terrific as usual! |
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