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Moon Dust

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since 1999-06-11

Posts 2177
Skelmersdale, UK

0 posted 2003-09-11 12:14 PM

Dust as settled thick as it is bitter,
Left unchanged, unbroken for those many years,
Moaning, weeping, dare not moving litter,
Dwelling on the past, sitting, as it leers,
Dark, deep and dank as in depression’s claws,
And the tears now as dry, as dusty,
As they fell an age before, against flaws,
The air thick, suffocating and musty,
Whispery wind thus gently soothing breeze,
Cascading dust falling, freely as fire,
And dust has now fallen trough breeze, trough trees
Trough brambles, trough hedges and trough brier,
The dust dispersed before was chance to mull,
Urn so empty only left my heart full.

If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come?

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant

since 2000-07-06

Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England

1 posted 2003-09-11 12:21 PM

Oh, the pictures that came to mind while reading this excellent piece were vivid...I love your use of descriptive phrases!! ~S~

Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart ~~S~~

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

2 posted 2003-09-11 12:21 PM

And the tears now as dry, as dusty,
As they fell an age before, against flaws,

Nice lines, good poem Moon Dust~

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

3 posted 2003-09-11 12:32 PM

Beautifully descriptive writing, Moon Dust.

EA

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

4 posted 2003-09-11 12:34 PM

very nice penning,,
i enjoyed the read,,,,

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

5 posted 2003-09-11 04:25 PM

(big hugggsssssss) This is a beautifully descriptive write, dearest friend, you have a flair for poetic vision, I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Maria, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

Moon Dust

Member Elite

since 1999-06-11

Posts 2177
Skelmersdale, UK

6 posted 2003-09-11 08:11 PM

Thanks I appericate all your comments

If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come?

mytuesdaywishes
Member

since 2003-09-05

Posts 254
a voice from the musicbox

7 posted 2003-09-15 11:50 PM

um...um...fantastic. you can convey such emotion in your imagery and sound. it's great to see a poet who knows how to feel the words.

Moon Dust

Member Elite

since 1999-06-11

Posts 2177
Skelmersdale, UK

8 posted 2003-09-17 08:17 AM

mytuesdaywishes - Thanks but its not hard to do their just metaphors

Have ago at it.

If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come?

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