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gemjop
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0 posted 2003-09-16 06:19 PM



I will
always know
it was not
merely
circumstance
that killed us
foolish girl
to think
we would
be
~if~
our now
was
a
different
place

I will
always pine
for the hands
that moved further
from me
than the time
and place
that took them
maybe it was
meant to be
like this
but
it will
never
feel
right


With thanks to Ethel for the inspiration this evening.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

© Copyright 2003 gj - All Rights Reserved
Cpat Hair
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1 posted 2003-09-16 06:20 PM


ah... nicely done Gem... both form and flow accenting the feeling...


Enchantress
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2 posted 2003-09-16 06:41 PM


Beautiful...love your writing!
~Hugs, Nancy~


~ I love your glances meeting mine
     across forever or the room ~

vlraynes
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3 posted 2003-09-16 06:46 PM



Just lovely, Gemma...I really enjoyed this.
Hugs,
~Vicky

When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

Earth Angel
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4 posted 2003-09-16 06:51 PM


Your words are as blood flowing from wounds into a sea of blues...

Loving, healing hugs,
Linda

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5 posted 2003-09-16 06:52 PM


Beauty lies here.
littlewing
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6 posted 2003-09-16 06:54 PM


gem - just sliding off the page here:

maybe it was
meant to be
like this
but
it will
never
feel
right

God, yes I know NEVER . . .
Absolutely beautiful
xxoo

Mistletoe Angel
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7 posted 2003-09-16 07:49 PM




(smiles) Oh Gemma, this is beautiful, sweet friend, Ethel is such an inspiration to us all with her gorgeous words of romance and compassion, just as you are! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is a keeper, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Gema, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
8 posted 2003-09-16 08:22 PM


what the squirrel said
mytuesdaywishes
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a voice from the musicbox
9 posted 2003-09-16 08:58 PM


the past comes to bite us all in the end, but for some reason, we'll always treasure those teethmarks.i love the part about the hands, so personal, so right. thanks for the words.


NewEnglandlazurlu
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10 posted 2003-09-16 09:22 PM


Beautiful Gemma!

Hugs, Marti

Hear Blessings dropping their blossoms all around you.

garysgirl
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11 posted 2003-09-16 11:30 PM


maybe it was
meant to be
like this
but
it will
never
feel
right



Thank you, Gemma.
I am glad that my poem inspired you to write
such a beautiful poem of your own. You know that
I'm keeping this. I love it.  
  and love,
Ethel Mae

angelblueyes
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12 posted 2003-09-16 11:39 PM


Such beauty here, just like in your heart.
Crystal

LeeJ
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13 posted 2003-09-17 08:29 AM


ahhhh Gem, your a soft pillow of the sweetest emotion, consideration, elegant, defining most, your soul's trace of an entire world of good thoughts for others, your special lady, and if I'm not mistaken, he will most assuridly understand the true woman in you and the greatness of your purpose in his life.  God bless you my friend.
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14 posted 2003-09-17 08:41 AM


cool i like. it has flowing emotion sensation

If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come?

Susan Caldwell
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15 posted 2003-09-17 09:19 AM


"maybe it was
meant to be
like this
but
it will
never
feel
right"

Yes and we are left with that...

Susan

ctowen
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Green Mountains of VT
16 posted 2003-09-17 09:24 AM


Echoes of strong emotions once running wild ...


        ... and free, ALWAYS and FOREVER-wood.

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