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Tim
Senior Member

since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

0 posted 2003-09-11 12:23 PM

What must I do to make you hear,
My simple words, I love you dear?
Lo’ I am but a man; no more,
No god from high on heaven’s floor,
Who sings a song of heaven’s splendor,
Just simple words is all I render,
I love you dear from forth my lips,
Your beauty doth the moon eclipse
In radiant glow, my fairest rose,
You are my life, my heart’s disclose,
So listen not of gods above,
But to my words, ‘tis you I love,
As to fair rose, I sing my song,
Of simple love, of my heart’s long.

[This message has been edited by Tim (09-11-2003 12:42 AM).]

MorninGlory
Member

since 2003-08-30

Posts 175
Oklahoma

1 posted 2003-09-11 12:33 PM

A beautiful poem, must be a very special lady. Very nice, very nice.

~ becky

SharaRose
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2501
Somewhere out there~

2 posted 2003-09-11 02:22 AM

I can sense the yearning to be heard. I hope your intended reads this. What a lucky lady to have a man to write these things to her!!!
A

for your hearts desire! The object of your affections. This was so touching. Lovely one!

SharaRose @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2003-09-11 06:36 AM

It always shows...
your caring ways...

Thank you Tim.

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

4 posted 2003-09-12 12:28 PM

Simple words are greater treasures than jewels... especially the most beautiful 3 of all. *S* Excellent work, Tim. *S*

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2003-09-12 01:29 PM

Ah, you wear your heart on your sleeve Tim..
Love looks good on ya!

~Hugs~

~ Summer can't be over...
I still have sand in my shoes ~

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

6 posted 2003-09-12 05:38 PM

Just simple words is all I render

and that is all one would ask for...

nice, Tim
*s
M

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

7 posted 2003-09-13 01:33 PM

So lovely!
Love, Margherita

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

8 posted 2003-09-13 01:49 PM

sweetly scented words

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

9 posted 2003-09-13 01:57 PM

As to fair rose, I sing my song,
Of simple love, of my heart’s long.

Oh goodness, this is so beautiful, Tim. Like Kacy,
there seemed to be a special scent to the words.
Just beautiful!!

Hugs

Ethel

arthur
Senior Member

since 2001-08-14

Posts 678
england

10 posted 2003-09-13 02:14 PM

i liked this
an honest attempt at an old fashioned love sonnet
brave of you to try -and a good try it is

splendour is pushing it a bit -but I have done worse
well done
arthur

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

11 posted 2004-07-03 10:58 AM

This is beautiful and the meter and syllable count are perfect!

Melissa~

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

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